Tomlev40

Plus, I think the doors when down still count as part of vehicle, so the 2" from the vehicle can be used from there

Double Post

Damn! My jaw just put a dent in my keyboard! Brilliant! The counts as Tellion and Libby are beautiful!

From what I know, he might be the only one who could be able to manufacture such a thing. Or somebody in the coalition could come and find it on a old world, full of lightning and arcane ruins.

Maybe he had something to do with Fabius Bile He's the man you want if you want biological warfare. He roams the stars giving Enhanced Warriors and anything else nasty to renegades for protection. It would be a nice tie in to the universe

The Forgotten Sons I like the name, very Unforgiven. The IA could do with some grammar mistakes like the "its" as possessive so "the Curse of the 21st Founding showed its (not it's face)" Perhaps a small little fact file about the Chapter, tell which Unforgiven chapter they are from Dark Angels Angels of Absolution Angels of Absolution Angels of Vengeance Disciples of Caliban Guardians of the Covenant Consecrators Explain why they are called the Angels of Healing (Many Apothecaries?) Chose from the list as to the parent Chapter, do a little research on the chapter, see which one suits you, which one has similar colour scheme (TBH I think that the colour scheme is a bit bland) Explain more about the curse, even if it just rumors of howls at night, some indication of the Curse. The Blood Chains ritual sound very VERY Khorne like, it looks like either a) The Inquisition come along and declare them Traitoris or they turn to Khorne. I would suggest finding a little bit less extreme ritual The idea of Puritywing is interesting, but I think that it should be that a small core of Pure Brothers taken from the companies to overseer the purity of the Chapter (a bit like Brother Corbulo). They should hunt down any information about how they could reverse the curse. Golgotha, I like the name, but the idea of Sisters next door could involve conflict because of the curse. The Sisters could have some intrest about the Chapter after hearing of the rituals. The Big Battle A coalition of Chaos Marines attack them system (Reasons why? Maybe they heard of the curse and were trying to convert them over to the Dark Side) I think that maybe you should have only one renegade band attack them, as large as the coalition so you can have a nemesis for the Chapter. Fallen Angels in the force attacking the planet seems good, keep that one. The name also is bugging me "Black Fingers". Stick with the "Black Fists", seems better. As for the battles, maybe there had been smaller battles on other planets, getting bigger and bigger and then onto Golgotha. Explain the virus, where did they get it from? Ancient world? Research Planet? Explain the mutations that took place, did it create new ones or build upon existing ones. Maybe have stories of how this turned the battle (to either side). What about the Sister in the system. Did they fight against the Black Fingers/Fists or did they refuse to fight with the Chapter as a result of the mutations. Overall a good idea (Writing a 21st Founding Chapter is very difficult) with some rough edges that can be smoothed out

But the thing is, ALL the legions are good at their own things. I think Horus said "Even Night Haunter is useful if you want the enemy :cuss ing in their breeches"