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Heralds of Light

'His light guides us, our faith shields us'


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he Heralds of Light are steadfast defenders of the Emperor. As members of the Astartes Praeses, they were created with the express purpose of guarding the regions surrounding the Eye of Terror. These unsung heroes stand valiantly against the traitor hordes from within the Eye until reinforcments can arrive, and have done so since the thirty-second millenium. It is a grueling task, but even as the Time of Ending draws near, the Chapter keeps fighting and refuse to abandon hope.


Origin

On the first day of the thirty-second millennium, the historical third founding was initiated. The Heresy was over, but the Imperium was still struggling, as Abaddon the Despoiler had recently launched his first Black Crusade from the Eye of Terror. And so for the first time in history, the High Lords of Terra decreed the founding of completely new Chapters, created with the genetic material of the old Legions. One of these Chapters was to be drafted into the Astartes Praeses, tasked with reinforcing Imperial control in the troubled space of Segmentum Obscurus and protecting the Imperium from further chaos invasions from the Eye of Terror. Chosen because of his Legion's unflinching bravery during the defence of Terra and to honor the supreme sacrifice he made for the Imperium, the Chapter was formed from the gene-seed of Rogal Dorn's Imperial Fists. The responsibility of training the new Chapter fell upon Captain Alcaeus.

The humble Alcaeus of the Imperial Fists was a great warrior, renowned for his frontline leadership and his almost optimistic nature, a rare trait in the dark times following the Heresy. A native of Holy Terra itself, he lived by the example of Rogal Dorn and considered himself a true servant of the Emperor. Alcaeus was honored when he was chosen to oversee the birth of a new Chapter, and accepted without hesitation. Together with a small cadre of his most trusted battle-brothers, he began molding the first young members of the Chapter into the ultimate defenders of humanity. They were named the Heralds of Light, for they would bring the Emperor's illumination to the darkest corners of the galaxy.

Gifted with the mighty Battle Barge Imperatorae Tonitrus and several Strike Cruisers from the forges of Mars, Alcaeus set sail towards Segmentum Obscurus, leading his men to countless victories. After two centuries, their initial crusade came to an end with the First Defense of Luxia. This battle saw the entire Chapter deployed on and above Luxia, a planet cut off from the rest of the Imperium during the outbreak of the Horus Heresy and was now under assault by a large warband of Word Bearers. Although the losses were grievous, the Heralds were victorious and were recognized as heroes and saviours by the Luxian people. The Luxians had fought bravely, despite their inferior equipment, and they had been fearless in the face of the traitors. Impressed, Alcaeus decided that Luxia would become the Chapter's homeworld.

Since that time the Heralds have made their name in the fight against Chaos, participating in several operations against emerging Chaos cults, including the five year long campaign against the Breakers of Chains. During the Age of Apostasy, the Heralds were nearly wiped out fighting the traitor hordes taking advantage of the internal powerstruggle. The Chapter was spread thin during the Gothic War trying to contain the invading forces, hunting down bands of Raiders who managed to slip through the Cadian Gate. For nearly nine millenia the Heralds of Light have fought the enemies of the Emperor, and Luxia has been a bulwark in the defense of the Imperium. Twelve Black Crusades have poured out from the Eye of Terror and every time the Heralds have defiantly stood their ground. They are as unyielding as a lighthouse; a symbol of humanity in a dark tempest. They have felt the full brunt of many attacks, suffered horrible losses and their morale has been pushed to the limit. But the Heralds of Light still stand guard, for they know that they are all that stands between the darkness of the Eye and the billions of defenseless Imperial citizens.


Homeworld

The Watchtower

Buildt in the architectural style of Rogal Dorn, the Heralds’ Fortress-Monastery is truly an impressive sight, a striking combination of beauty and high functionality. Alcaeus was undeniably inspired by the defenses of his old homeworld, doing everything in his power to ensure that Luxia would stand against any threat. The outer layers of the Fortress consist mostly of massive walls and defense mechanisms, while the majority of the Chapter facilities are below the surface, as an added protection against orbital bombardment. The extreme thoroughness of the Chapter's systemwide defense systems has proven to be well worth the effort, for the Heralds have several times been forced to fight in the Luxian system.

On the highest point of the Watchtower, a great torch is kept alive by a constant stream of highly flammable gas. The chemical structure of this gas produces a bright blue flame, which when reflected by the Fortress walls and ice crystals of the northern tundra, surrounds the area with an ethereal aura. Known as the Flame of the Emperor, this torch is of great symbolic importance to the Heralds, representing the light of Mankind in the darkness of space. To let the flame die out would be an ill omen.
Luxia is located in Segmentum Obscurus in the galactic north, not too far south of the Eye of Terror in the Turbatus sub-sector. The beautiful planet is covered in wide oceans, deep forests and high mountains, similar to Terra of ages long gone. This bright beacon of the emperor’s light is a great contrast to the rest of the dark segmentum, and to the Heralds, Luxia is a the very symbol of everything the Emperor fought for. They have therefore made it their sacred duty to forever protect Luxia, no matter what.

This prosperous civilized world, settled during the Great Crusade, became a testament of the Emperor’s vision for the human empire; strong and uncorrupted. Due to its isolation during the Heresy, Luxia was unscathed by the fires of war, and remained an tranquil world until it was rediscovered. Even in times of conflict between the various Luxian states, the people of Luxia raised great leaders, able to unite the whole population and uphold the harmony. The great Luxian library, located in the largest city, contained literature, art, relics and documents from the times before the Heresy, making sure that knowledge of the Imperium was not lost with the old generations. This library is still maintained, and is cherished by both the population and the Astartes. Luxia never forgot about the Emperor, and after some time the people of Luxia began to believe that one day his angels would return, and reunite them with the Emperor.

Allthough civilized, the Luxian people still have a strong warrior culture. Huge and dangerous predators roam the planets wilderness, and ever since the isolation, these creatures have been the populations main protein source and great honor is placed in hunting down these beasts. The Luxian Planetary Defence Force work vigorously to uphold its standards, and has even been able to fend off eldar pirates during the isolation. Fighting a common, external enemy greatly contributed to strengthening the union between the Luxian population during these times. Today the PDF has evolved; as equipment has greatly improved and training is now geared towards interplanetary combat as well. There have even been times were the PDF has fought alongside the Chapter on other worlds. Fully aware of the Astartes presence on their world, the Luxian populace look towards their guardians with great reverence, and to have a member of the family join the Chapters ranks is an immense honor.

The Fortress-Monastery of the Heralds, the Watchtower, is located at the north pole of Luxia on a massive tundra of ice and rock. The enormous tundra is the most dangerous area on the whole planet and it is rarely braved by the people of Luxia, as none of them truly knows what lays in wait there. Only an Astartes can survive in its unforgiving environment, and that is why anyone who wish to join the Chapter must walk across the tundra with only themselves to rely on. Those who survive show that they are strong and self-reliant, proving their worth to the chapter. The Heralds only want recruits willing to surrender their lives to the Emperor, and so the recruits must come to the chapter if they wish to join. The only exception to this is during the Festival of the Emperor every tenth year, a huge celebration in memory of the first defense of Luxia. During this celebration, great competitions are held with promising young fighters from all over Luxia take part in sword duels. The last fighter standing is the champion and when he has been announced, he is traditionally asked by the Master of Recruits to join the Chapter. Never has a combatant turned down the offer, and many of those who were once winners of this contest, eventually became legendary warriors of the chapter.


Combat Doctrine

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As members of the Astartes Praeses, the duties of the Heralds require them to frequently fight alongside other Imperial organizations. They have gained a reputation for throwing themselves into combat to support their allies, occasionally forgoing comprehensive planning in favor of providing aid as fast as possible. As a consequence, the Heralds do not always fight on their own terms, having participated in numerous defensive operations as well as other tasks that are not common for an Astartes Chapter. This approach to combat has proven to be very strenuous on the Heralds and the number of casualties has at times been dangerously high. The Heralds themselves believe that it is their responsibility as Astartes to fight the battles others cannot, no matter how punishing it may be for them.

Whilst they have been known for their lack of planning, it is in the heat of battle the Heralds have gained their renown. The Heralds have always been a flexible fighting force, able to quickly react to an ever-changing combat situation and have become famous for their ability to adapt and improvise. Alcaeus was a devoted follower of the Codex Astartes and instilled his men with the same degree of devotion. Yet, he rocognized that to be truly flexible one has to be flexible towards the Codex as well, a belief which has served the Chapter well over the years. Cooperation with allied organizations has always been important to the Heralds, and to effectively work together with another fighting force, one must be able to take advantage of each others strengths. They have therefore not specialized themselves in a single aspect of warfare, but strive to excel in all areas so that they may better support their allies. Their reliability and willingness to cooperate is viewed favourably by both Imperial commanders and citizens alike.

In addition to their parent chapter's adherence to the Codex Astartes, the Imperial Fists reluctance to accept the possibility of defeat has also been inherited by the Heralds. This can sometimes blind the Heralds to risk, resulting in them fighting on where other chapters would fall back or retreat. The Heralds themselves view it as absolutely necessary for a servant of the Emperor to be willing to die in battle, and the Chaplains constantly preach of self-sacrifice. Only by the supreme sacrifice of some of the greatest Imperial heroes, like Rogal Dorn or the Emperor himself, does the Imperium still stand. It is their resolute nature that keeps them fighting on where others would give up.


Organization

The Heralds are organized along the lines the Codex sets out. Aside from the headquarters staff and support personel, the Chapter is divided into ten companies each with its own heraldry and name, often representing the duties of the Company Captains. This includes the ‘Guardians of the Flame’ of the second and the ‘Shield Bearers’ of the fifth. The first is like in most Chapters the Veteran Company. The 'Blades of Dorn', as they are called, are the most experienced and skilled warriors the chapter has to offer. Rarely operating as a whole company, the Blades are typically spread throughout the Chapter, where their wisdom can be imparted to the more unexperienced battle-brothers. The second through fifth are the Battle Companies, while the sixth through ninth are the Reserve Companies. The Reserve Companies are currently understrength due to the ravages of war, and as the Heralds have vowed to never leave Luxia unguarded, they always leave at least one of these companies on Luxia. The tenth is the Scout Company, containing the newly inducted recruits of the Chapter. Like the veterans, they are spread throughout the Chapter, fighting alongside their older brethren.

The Imperatorae Tonitrus is the flagship of the Chapter’s fleet, and has been ever since the chapter was created. This old and venerable Battle Barge bears the scars of countless battles, and it is one of their most valued assets. It is also the only Battle Barge they possess, and it is only used when needed the most. Instead, the smaller Strike Cruisers are more frequently used as their extra speed is preferred, and there are as many as nine Strike Cruisers in the Chapter’s fleet. These vessels are largely crewed by the Chapter's Naval Serfs; men who are fanatically loyal to the Chapter and under the command of only a handful of Astartes these men are more than capable of both maintaining and defending the fleet. Unlike many other Chapters, where Serfs are nothing more than servants or slaves, the Heralds aknowledge their Serfs with respect, and to join the Chapter as a Serf is the greatest honor, aside from becoming one of the Astartes. The Heralds have been known to draw their Serfs from both the people of Luxia and volunteers from nearby systems.


Beliefs

'We fight the battles others can not win, we suffer the pain others can not endure, we face the horrors others can not withstand.
For we are Astartes; This is our duty and we embrace it.'


Venerable Brother Morpheus

Reclusiarch Morpheus had served as Second Company Chaplain for almost two centuries when Abaddon's third Black Crusade was unleashed upon the Imperium. The Heralds of Light Second Company became engaged in the defense of the Lumbark system. On the ice steppes of Hive World Lumbark Prime, Morpheus was mortally wounded defending the largest Hive against a massive chaos offensive. Though many of his brothers had fallen, Morpheus refused to give in to his wounds. When Morpheus finally returned to the battlefield, entombed within the armoured shell of a dreadnoughthis, his presence reinvigorated the Imperial defense, leading to the total destruction of the chaos forces in the system.

After the Battle of Lumbark, Morpheus was at the vanguard of every counter-attack, fighting with the same zealous fury as before his entombment. In the end, the Imperium stood victorious, and the forces of chaos retreated back to the Eye of Terror. As the Heralds of Light returned to Luxia to rebuild, Morpheus was placed deep within the vaults of the Watchtower where he would rest. His only request was to be awoken when Abaddon returned. And so for every subsequent Black Crusade, Brother Morpheus has risen from his slumber to defend Humanity from the servants of the Dark Gods.
The cult of the Heralds places great emphasis on humility, self-sacrifice, and loyalty. They see themselves as servants of the Emperor and therefore protectors of humanity. All who live under the light of the Emperor are worthy of their protection, and the Heralds are known for their tolerance of both ordinary humans and even abhumans. Unlike the majority of Chapters, the Heralds are not exceedingly proud or self-absorbed, but humble and reserved. They exist to serve mankind, not the other way around. The Heralds value the splitting of power in the empire as absolutely necessary, but they also strongly believe that if mankind is to be victorious, the forces of the Imperium must work together. Their humbleness and willingness to collaborate has earned them many allies within the Adeptus Astartes and other Imperial organizations.

During their existence, the Heralds have developed a conviction that the Emperor will one day rise from the Golden Throne, and unite humanity against Chaos. This is due to the beliefs of the Luxian people, which over the years have been absorbed by the Heralds own belief system. Their duty is to keep the Imperium safe, until the Emperor returns and leads them in a second Great Crusade. The chapter also venerate the Emperor not as a God, but as the greatest man the Galaxy has ever seen. Due to their beliefs, the chapter has a strained relationship with the Ecclesiarchy. But this is typically ignored due to their cordial relations with other Imperial organizations, and because of their unquestionable loyalty to the Emperor.

The Heralds of Light bear an intense hatred for Chaos in all its forms, and it is abhorred for its corrupting touch. Too often has the influence of chaos, manipulating the minds of men, been witnessed by the Heralds, and often is the corruption of one man enough to throw an entire planet in devastation. Falling to the Dark Gods is the greatest betrayal to the Emperor and cannot be tolerated. The Ruinuos Powers is considered to be the ultimate threat to the human empire, and the Heralds show no mercy when it comes to the annihilation of Chaos. They have been especially vigorous during the various Black Crusades over the millenia, and this in turn has earned them the hatred of many Chaos worshippers. To them, Luxia is the greatest provocation, a torch burning with the flame of the False Emperor.


Gene-seed

Proud successors of the Imperial Fists, the bond between the Heralds of Light and their Primarch is much more than just genetic, as each warrior strive to live and die just as Rogal Dorn did. Many of his traits have been inherited by the Heralds, including his unyielding nature, but they also display his tendancy towards self-sacrifice. Despite the close proximity to the Eye of Terror, the Heralds' gene-seed remain stable with no signs of mutation, and the Apothacaries work vigorously to keep it that way. Over the millennia, however, the zygote cultures required to grow both the Betcher's gland and the Sus-an membrane have been lost or damaged, removing the ability to spit corrosive acid or enter a state of suspended animation. But like true descendants of the Imperial Fists, the Heralds do not consider these organs as losses, for what servant of the Emperor spends time hibernating or spitting acid, when he can spend his time awake, destroying the enemies of the Imperium with the bolter and the chainsword.


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Edited by Codex Grey, 06 May 2009 - 12:48 PM.


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When a chapter is named, the chapter master consults the Emperors Tarot for a name for the chapter. So, by proxy the Emperor names all chapters, and if they are given names that dont make sense, then it is usually made clear at some point.

Though there are others that argue against this point, so I suppose your chapter could go without bieng named. Doesent bother me anyway.

I DO like your story though. It isnt overindulgant on information, it is to the point, concise and most of all, it grabs you and makes you want to read it.

Though a little bit of semantical clear up would be good, for example:

His prayers was heard;



Should be, "His prayers were answered;"

Stuff like that, it just makes it flow a bit better, especially for someone like me who picks up almost every little mistake like that. Yes I know, im torturing myself mostly haha.

All in all, good work I say.

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When a chapter is named, the chapter master consults the Emperors Tarot for a name for the chapter. So, by proxy the Emperor names all chapters, and if they are given names that dont make sense, then it is usually made clear at some point.

Though there are others that argue against this point, so I suppose your chapter could go without bieng named. Doesent bother me anyway.

I DO like your story though. It isnt overindulgant on information, it is to the point, concise and most of all, it grabs you and makes you want to read it.

Though a little bit of semantical clear up would be good, for example:

His prayers was heard;



Should be, "His prayers were answered;"

Stuff like that, it just makes it flow a bit better, especially for someone like me who picks up almost every little mistake like that. Yes I know, im torturing myself mostly haha.

All in all, good work I say.


Well, unless anyone else have strong arguments against it, I think I'll just keep the name part.

Glad you liked it, I guess I achieved what I wanted. :angry:

I have changed it to: His prayers were answered. Like I said, I'm norwegian, so if you see anything else that just doesn't
flow or sound right, please say so, it will be greatly appreciated. But no need to torture yourself :rolleyes:

++updated: Homeworld, combat doctrine and organization++

Edited by Codex Grey, 29 June 2007 - 05:15 PM.


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i read this a while ago, and waited to post, but waited too long and now i'll need to reread it. i do know one thing, you have your chapter waiting a long time to pick a name, and while i can't say, "no, this is how it's done!" it seems a little too long to me, i think they would have had something before that. what about changing your first chapter master's name to luxia? then you can just say they chose to name themselves after him.

also, your chapter master, are you trying to say he fought during the heresy, because this is a bit of a stretch and would make him close to 1000 years old by the time of the third founding, which while not unheard of, isn't the norm by any stretch of the imagination, and he would likely have been either too old for active dute, in a dread, or the chapter master of the fists himself, don't you think? if you're simply saying he was recruited after the heresy and that the spectre of the heresy was still hanging over the chapter 800 years later, well, then i can accept that.
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what about changing your first chapter master's name to luxia? then you can just say they chose to name themself after him.


I could do this, because the of the tight bond between the master and his chapter. However, the reason I chose the name was this: Luxia is a made up name, but it is based on the latin word lux, which means light. I wanted Luxia to be a contrast to the rest of the dark segmentum. Also, I chose Sons of Luxia, beacause I wanted this close relationship between chapter and homeworld. I'll have to think about this abit more. I could also say they had a name, but changed it, but I don't like that, and you don't like that.

also, your chapter master, are you trying to say he fought during the heresy?


No, I'm not. Maybe I should make that more clear? It was part of my initial plan to have Alcaeus be a promising marine when Dorn died during the black crusade, which had an affect on Alcaeus, but since there was/is so much disargeement on the subject of Dorn's death and the age of a marine, I decided to drop it.

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also, your chapter master, are you trying to say he fought during the heresy, because this is a bit of a stretch and would make him close to 1000 years old by the time of the third founding, which while not unheard of, isn't the norm by any stretch of the imagination, and he would likely have been either too old for active dute, in a dread, or the chapter master of the fists himself, don't you think? if you're simply saying he was recruited after the heresy and that the spectre of the heresy was still hanging over the chapter 800 years later, well, then i can accept that.


Bzzt, I don't think you're right there. As far as I know, no Space Marine has died from old age, they all tend to die in battle. Also, the current chapter master of the Blood Angels, Dante, is well over a thousand years old. So I don't feel that this an entirely long stretch of the imagination. I would also think Marines from the heresy era were of "sterner stuff" than they are now. Of course, that is entirely my opinion.

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Dante is like 1,100 years old and BA fluff makes him out to be one of the oldest marines still on active duty who's not in a dread. also, it's explicitly stated in a few books and i think in a codex that marines who are old or crippled are given non-combat jobs. Crimson Wake mentions this and the one source i've ever read that states that a marine could live forever, one of the first two horus heresy books, doesn't really say that, it says that no one knows since they've never survived long enough to find out if that's the case or not. but Iacton gets old and it mentions how it slows him down and he wasn't nearly 800 years old i don't think.

...a distress call which had seemed to been playing for many centuries. Baffled by this information, Alcaeus ordered his fleet to answer the call.

Though the attack had just recently begun, most of the traitor forces were already on the surface.


please clarify this for me? which is it? if it's the first one, the world would have been over run without help... marines dont' fight for years on end, they win, even chaos marines. if it's the other then i would suggest fixing the earlier, contridicting statement, or at least clarifying what you're trying to say.

i suggested the name change because it was the simplest way, otherwise i would suggest they choose Luxia right from the start, a chapter of like 800 marines who've been fighting for years needs a name. like i said, it's open to interpretation but it just doesn't sit too well with me.

Edited by utilityzero, 30 June 2007 - 01:16 PM.

1% of people know that answer to, "What's the F.T.W. stand for?" You're not one of them.
8% of teenagers dont listen to rap and 2% havnt tried pot OR drinking... and an even smaller percentage of people actually feel the need to bolster their own self-esteem by putting a spin on being rhythmicly challenged and having no social life.
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50% of marines apparently get lost in the warp. If only the guy who came up with that plot had gotten lost in the warp first.

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Please clarify this for me?


I'm sorry, just a piece of an old idea. Don't know why it's still there <_<
It has been changed.

i suggested the name change because it was the simplest way


I know, and I appreciate every suggestion. I'm just trying to justify what I have done. In the end, I may even use your idea. I just want to hear what other people have to say about first.

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I have now changed the name of my chapter, and have moved away from the "long time before they got named" thing.
I actually like the new name. I think it's more original then Sons of... , pluss It gets rid of the debate of wether or not a chapter can go a long time without a name.

C&C is welcomed.

+Edit: I have added the beliefs section.+

Edited by Codex Grey, 01 July 2007 - 09:18 PM.


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Hmm, three posts in a row :)

Anyways, the Excubitors are now updated. Same questions as before(top of the first post) and other C&C are still welcomed.

Specific question: I can't seem to come up with a good battle-cry that sums up the chapter. Any suggestions are welcomed.

Hopefully there will be more replies this time.

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Looks Very good. Grats. I cant think of anything to say at the moment. Ill come back once im not jumping up and down due to hunger and having just gotten out of bed.

Often when no one posts its due to not having anything to point out/make fun of/shoot down/make a nuisance of themselves with. So its not all bad.

PS. did I already say that I love your colour scheme? If not then I do!

Edited by Grey Hunter Ydalir, 09 July 2007 - 07:15 AM.

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Looks Very good. Grats. I cant think of anything to say at the moment. Ill come back once im not jumping up and down due to hunger and having just gotten out of bed.

Thank you. I await any further comments.

Often when no one posts its due to not having anything to point out/make fun of/shoot down/make a nuisance of themselves with. So its not all bad.

Either that, or its just boring :teehee:

PS. did I already say that I love your colour scheme? If not then I do!

No you did not, but I'm glad you like it.

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is that color scheme exactly how you want the marines to look? if you can, i would suggest adding some sort of variation to the scheme, as right now it looks like it has been used before.

other than that, i love the background. the Excubitors (btw, what does that mean?) sound like the pinnacle of what the Adeptus Astartes are supposed to be. one question though- did they have a homeworld before they found Luxia, or were they a "crusade" chapter (ala Black Templars)? it is probably the latter, but i was just wondering.

oh yeah, and is there a template for IA's? i keep thinking there is, but i can't remember...

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is that color scheme exactly how you want the marines to look? if you can, i would suggest adding some sort of variation to the scheme, as right now it looks like it has been used before.

I don't paint or play, so I just picked a scheme that I thought was cool and represented my chapter. I have seen similar shemes too, but a lot of shemes are similar, so I don't think I will be changing it as I like it as it is. But I am open for suggestions.

other than that, i love the background. the Excubitors (btw, what does that mean?) sound like the pinnacle of what the Adeptus Astartes are supposed to be. one question though- did they have a homeworld before they found Luxia, or were they a "crusade" chapter (ala Black Templars)? it is probably the latter, but i was just wondering.

Glad you liked it. Excubitor is Latin for sentinel/watchman/guard. It's the latter, just like their parents(Imp. Fists) and their brothers(Black Templars). I thought this was clear? If not, let me know, and maybe I'll make clearer.

oh yeah, and is there a template for IA's? i keep thinking there is, but i can't remember...

I just used the codes:

Here

Edited by Codex Grey, 09 July 2007 - 10:30 PM.


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The new chapter was named Excubitors, for they were the sentinels of the human empire.


ah, there it is...

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Insignium Astartes Heralds of Light


The Heralds of Light Chapter is organized closely along the lines set out by the Codex Astartes and use many of the most common markings among Codex Adherent Chapters. But throughout the millennia the Heralds have forged their own heraldic traditions that set them apart from their brother Astartes. The most notable markings include the way they denote the different Companies. Each Company has its own honorific name, often symbolizing the special duties of their Captains, and heraldry ranging from simple symbols to changes in color.

Company Overview

Company

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1st Veteran Company
Blades of Dorn

Upon being inducted into the First Company, a Herald is awarded with an Honor Blade. These power swords have been passed down through generations and serve both as symbols of their Company and as powerful close combat weapons. Although Veteran Astartes are given much freedom in terms of personal decoration, many still choose to wear the Company’s personal insignia, The black sword of Dorn, in one form or another on their armor.

2nd Battle Company
Guardians of the Flame

The second Captain is the Master of the Watch, and by extension his men are the custodians of the Fortress Monastery. The second Captain is also more often than not the Chapter’s finest expert on defense. As the Flame of the Emperor burns brightly upon the Watchtower, the Guardians have adopted the blue flame as their Company insignia. The flame is commonly displayed on knee or shoulder guards, alongside any other markings. Since the flame is a symbol of the Emperor Himself, many of the more zealous brothers, like the Company Chaplain, have covered almost their entire armor in flames.
3rd: Radient KnightsMorpheus Scythe, Master of the Arsenal
4th: Wings of Vengeancesecond column of the third row
5th (Battle Company)second column of the third row
6th (Tactical Reserve)second column of the third row
7th (Tactical Reserve)second column of the third row
8th (Assault Reserve)second column of the third row
9th (Devestator Reserve)second column of the third row
10th (Scout Company)second column of the third row

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I have been wanting to redo my first Chapter for a long time. The reasons are varied, but the most obvious one is the name. It was something I struggled with for a long time during the intitial creating. The problem with the current one is that it is not english, and I want a good english name like almost every other Chapter in the world. I wanted my Astartes to be able to say 'I am a ...' , Like 'I am a Dark Angel', I am a Space Wolf' or 'I am a Black Templar'. Now they can say 'I am a Herald of Light'.

Aside from the name the changes are few. I also hope that the members who didn't see this before can provide fresh comments on how to improve.

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The warp storms that had plagued the galaxy during the Age of Strife were disappearing.

I thought that they had already disappeared by the time of the Great Crusade but I can't remember any sources. I'll scrabble through my rulebooks.

Raging Orcs...

Is that a new race from Fantasy?

terrorizing imperial worlds

Capital 'I'.


upon Captain Alcaeus Tutor.

Bit of a coincidental name, Tutor, considering he's raising a new chapter...

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Do I need to say anything? ;)

Gifted with the mighty Venerable Battle Barge Imperatorae Tonitrus from the forges of Mars

The way you say 'from the forges of Mars' implies that it's new, yet you say it's venerable. Confuzzled me.

Alcaeus set sail towards Segmentum Obscurus and started the process of training and building up the chapter.

The line before you've said 'he began molding the first young members' so there's a little repetition going on here. If you drop training, there wouldn't be a problem.

Indeed, so close was the bond between the master and his warriors, that for a while the chapter was known as his sons.

Known as his sons? Didn't really get it.

crushing the enemies of the Imperium under their power armored heels.

'Boots' conjure up more brutal images than 'heels' for me.

Without wasting more time, Alcaeus, eager to prove his Chapter's worth in battle, ordered the fleet to head for the nearby system.

Perhaps mention avenging Dorn's death as well.

fighting a loosing battle

Losing.

luxian surface

Capital 'L'. In a few other places as well.

their allies sides

Ally's, if you're referring to the chapter or allies' if you're referring to the marines.

Together they stubbornly repelled the first wave of Word Bearers.

You mentioned before that the planet was already fighting a losing battle.

diciple

Disciple.

His prayers were answered; as ten of his men sacrificed themselves in a pool of blood, Sethos was infused with dark magick and transformed into a Daemon Prince, eager to spill the blood of the imperials.

Daemons Princes are fairly rare and the Chaos Gods don't just change people just for praying. Perhaps mention some more of Sethos' background and why the Chaos Gods would answer his prayers.

punnishment

Punishment.

Their first battle is given too much space. They are a Third Founding chapter, yet the only battle mentioned in any detail in the entire IA is this one. They need some more history behind them. You could also tighten up the rest of the IA in a similar way.

Right now, the IA is alright. But the chapter isn't. The chapter lacks a real theme or distinguishing features. I hate to say it, but right now it's bland. I know how bad it feels to have someone say that to you, so I don't say it lightly. On the positive side, all you need to do is inject some theme and then it will be a good IA and chapter. I'd first establish what theme or core of the chapter is going to be and tell us, so we can help you establish this in the IA.

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Bit of a coincidental name, Tutor, considering he's raising a new chapter...


Tutor is also latin for defender, guardian, protector, so its not coincidental at all. :D I thought about replacing it with Tudor, though. Thoughts?


Librarian Patronus

Do I need to say anything?

Yes. I don't get it. :tu:

The way you say 'from the forges of Mars' implies that it's new, yet you say it's venerable. Confuzzled me.

I'll drop the venerable there, but keep it in org section, as after 10 000 years it would be considered venerable, right?

Known as his sons? Didn't really get it.

It is supposed to be '...known as the Sons of Alcaeus'. It was from an old text file.

You mentioned before that the planet was already fighting a losing battle.

Would 'fighting a desperate battle' work?

Daemons Princes are fairly rare and the Chaos Gods don't just change people just for praying. Perhaps mention some more of Sethos' background and why the Chaos Gods would answer his prayers.

In the old version it was a Bloodthirster instead, and Sethos was just the leader of that warband. I reasoned that, yes, they are both rare, but by removing the bloodthirster and focusing on Sethos, giving him some more background and motivation, and then elevating him to Daemon Prince, He could be sort of like an archenemy of the Heralds, returning from the warp millenia later to get revenge. I don't know if this is possible, so comments on this would be great. But you say that more background is needed. I have tried to do this, bu tmaybe not enough. I don't know how I am supposed to do this without taking up to much space.

Their first battle is given too much space. They are a Third Founding chapter, yet the only battle mentioned in any detail in the entire IA is this one. They need some more history behind them. You could also tighten up the rest of the IA in a similar way.

Is it really too much, or just too much for being the only battle detailed? I was considering adding a History section after that one, shedding some light on what they done the last 9 thousand years. Would that be good? What do you mean by '...the rest of the IA in a similar way'?

As for your other comments, like grammar and stuff, this will be dealt with.

Right now, the IA is alright. But the chapter isn't. The chapter lacks a real theme or distinguishing features. I hate to say it, but right now it's bland. I know how bad it feels to have someone say that to you, so I don't say it lightly. On the positive side, all you need to do is inject some theme and then it will be a good IA and chapter. I'd first establish what theme or core of the chapter is going to be and tell us, so we can help you establish this in the IA.

This is actually the kind of comment I've been waiting for. I've always known that the Chapter was lacking, and that's why I want to redo it. Since it was my first IA I wanted to make the type of Chapter that was more 'the good guys' than most Chapters. I wanted to make the type of Chapter I would choose to be in. It ended up with a decent IA about a Chapter that steels from alot of other Chapters, but has no character of its own. And since I know this, your comment just makes me want to improve the IA more.

Now, I guess the themes I went for the first time were 'defenders of man' and 'very cooperative with others'. But with the recent name change, I was thinking of bringing in some 'bringers of the Emperors light' imagery as well. I will have to think about this.

Any suggestions or comments are welcomed.

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Well, it seems that this Chapter sparked just as little interest now as it did the first time I posted it(over two years ago), but I don't blame you. I know I have some thematic issues with this article and thats something I just have to sort out. Still, any suggestions are welcomed, so I'm bumbing this one more time, but if no one has anything to add, this thread will once again rest untill I come up with a good way of redoing the Chapter.

Edited by Codex Grey, 28 January 2009 - 09:18 PM.


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Well, it seems that this Chapter sparked just as little interest now as it did the first time I posted it(over two years ago), but I don't blame you. I know I have some thematic issues with this article and thats something I just have to sort out. Still, any suggestions are welcomed, so I'm bumbing this one more time, but if no one has anything to add, this thread will once again rest untill I come up with a good way of redoing the Chapter.


I'm always a fan of "Designer's Notes" - I'd be keen on you telling us what you think the thematic issues are - it would certainly open up avenues for discussion.
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Well... the problem I have is I'm not sure how I can help you.

I suppose the first thing is to ask the question...

How do you see your chapter going about bring the emperors light?
When you think of 'the light' in a non-literal way what imagery is brought up?


For my own chapter I am still working to answer the questions of theme... as well as a name. The Rave Demons though I love them dearly are not a true 40k chapter... more like legion... so I've set out creating my own chapter.

_Scorpions_ (place holder name), are a chapter that is born of the 13th founding and cursed to never be able to allow themselves to simply let go as when they do they become powerful and neigh unstoppable juggernauts but they also burnout and die.

I also want to include that the battle-brothers out of the 'hunt' down Scorpions, in name and form only, native to their home world. The Scorpion's thick armored hide is then incorporated into their power armor, some also alter their weapons. This is done because the chapter feels as though their armor, and weapons, are incomplete/empty/unhappy without the companion spirit of the Scorpion.

At the rate I'm going on this scorpion hunting I'm finding that my chapter is moving away from it's 13th founding curse and that the curse is starting to feel strapped on as a gimmick and yet I also don't want to lose it.

I have no idea if this helps you or not...

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Well, what I feel is the thematic issue is as I mentioned that there is no primary theme, just a bunch of different themes and ideas, none of wich are the main focus of the Chapter and none of which are particularly original. The only excuse I have for this is that this was my first Chapter. I'm the kid of guy who plays games where you can choose to be good or evil, and I just have to good the first time I play through the game, because anything else would just feel wrong :) So when creating my first Chapter, I wanted them to be 'the good guys', or at least as nice as space marines can get. So that meant marines who protected the weak, and the end didn't always justify the means. Also I wanted a good relationship between the Chapter and their homeworld (And already we see the similarities with the Salamanders).

To further the good guy aspect of the Chapter, I wanted them to have a good relationship with other Imperial Organizations, seeing the importance in the splitting of powers but still valuing the cooperation between the different factions( ultramarines). And then you have the similarities to the Imperial Fists, being a successor of Rogal Dorns Legion.
(Maybe I should just make them Chapter with mixed gene-seed from the Salamanders, the Ultras and the Fists and just call it a day :D )

Now when you take all these aspects of the Chapter together they compliment eachother, and it makes sence. But again there is no focus or character of it's own.

So, if I was to take one aspect and make it the focus, what would it be? One of the main things about these guys that I always wanted to portray ( but maybe not done it right) is the 'defenders' aspect. Space Marines in general are considered to be an elite strike force, this is what they are designed for. While the Heralds would most certainly perform the normal duties of space marines, they participate in far more defensive operation than other Chapter. One idea I've been toying around with is making them one of the Astartes Praeses. This would solidify their role as defenders, eternaly guarding the Eye of Terror (while fighting other races as well,of course) It also works well with their hatred for Chaos in all its forms. Maybe I can use the 'Light' imagery here, the light being the Emperor's way; the Darkness being all that has turned from this light, heretics and traitors. They bring the Empreror's light to those who try to hide in the shadows. Homeworld is then important to the Chapter because it is a symbol of the Emperor's Light in the face of darkness, the Eye of Terror.

Well, that's rambling for you.

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They bring the Empreror's light to those who try to hide in the shadows.

The problem with this is that it's almost directly opposite the defenders theme. Unless they believe that the best form of defence is offense.

The other problem that I forgot to mention was that they didn't really have any flaws. To offset all the good things, there has to be some bad things :)

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The problem with this is that it's almost directly opposite the defenders theme. Unless they believe that the best form of defence is offense

They don't exclusively fight on the defensive side. But I see what you mean and a change of the line can make it fit more with the defenders theme. 'They bring the Emperor's light to those surrounded by the Dark Gods, repelling the darkness with fiery illumination.' Or something like that.

The other problem that I forgot to mention was that they didn't really have any flaws. To offset all the good things, there has to be some bad things

I was thinking about take the self-sacrifice aspect of the Imperial Fists to the next level, making it amlost an obsession to sacrifice themselves in the name of the Emperor. This would make the number of casualties very high, giving them a flawed side. Thoughts?

Also Sigismund, if you have the time, can give me your thoughts on the comments I left for your previous comments?




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