While that would be more unique, I think that I want to stick with them being more roaming than tied to a specific location. However, yes, I think they would return to Akhundras II (the actual planet) for regular recruiting cycles, but I do want to keep Akhundras II as more their "spiritual" homeworld, much like some Chapters have spiritual Primarchs. I do think that they would keep a small (probably no more than 10 Marines) garrison in a small keep, but that's probably about it.
Well you have fleshed out the tribes of Akhundras very well... fixed settlements but very low tech, rivalry between the clans but not outright war, cultural references to the saviour agianst the primordial evil... All boxes ticked - well done! Why not make your Akhundras your homeworld? A Fortress monastery in the arid hilltops of the desert would give both a knightly reference and a mystic dimension for the Akhundras people... Hey, you'll even get the chance to describe a Fortress Monastery! I mean Akhundras is now a fairly detailed setting - it can do with an upgrade in the contex of its place in your Chapter. It's also a good opportunity to make the Stoneburners kind of unique among the Unforgiven as they'd be having a Homeworld of their own... Just a thought.
Glad you like. I was really trying to capture more of the older school feel to the Dark Angels with regard to their brutality (and in some ways, the greater brutality of all Chapters at the time), as well as trying to allude to the stone burners of the Dune saga, where they are "dial a destruction level" atomic weapons. The "sloppiness" is supposed to be a more recent, and the censure was to act as the "dial" on their destructive tendencies. Then again, they don't like most of the "soft" Imperial citizens...
Wow! Black sheep even among the Unforgiven? I like the loose cannon character you've given them - they are fanatics equivalent to some Blood Angels successors as in they do not care drawing attention to their exterme actions as long as the job's done. But being repremanded by the rest of the Unforgiven? That's really is putting them in a league of their own because it's not the hunt that's too severe but the fact that they not care so much about the cover up! So more direct and brutal than the average Unforgiven with the risk of becoming a liability? I can see potential there... On the downside they might come accross a little "sloppy". By that I mean that the Unforgiven are like hunters of the Fallen but they also go to great lengths to clean-up the mess so no compromising evidence will leak...
I think this chapter is in stark contrast with Brother Captain Sharp's Angels of Vengeance - they are the "cleaners" of the Unforgiven! Maybe you guys should work together on a story!
All Company Veterans are considered for advancement, but they won't lose the marking even if they are "passed over" - they are just told that they need "more" or something.
OK, I'm lost... AGAIN!
So, company Veterans (2-7th) a bone stripe on black helmet but that also might mean that they are Inner Circle potentials?
Nah. Their lower mask being bone doesn't actually indicate anything other than a bone "beak" representation.
And 2nd Company - are they all company veterans - and Inner Circle potentials?
Well, joining the Deathwalkers would be the first step into the Inner Circle. All members of the Second Company are not Deathwalkers though, no. The Boneseeker veterans are going to be the Black Knight equivalent... Right on the verge of becoming a Deathwalker.
So they are DW already and could potentially be Inner Circle material (surely they can not join the Inner Circle straight from the un-initiated)?
If any of them are seconded back to any other Company, yes, they will continue to wear the Deathwalker panoply.
But if they are DW (i.e. Non-Terminator Deathwalkers) then they'll be having white helmets as per your description above...
Nah, there aren't THAT many. But, glad you like the figs! Once I get more stuff painted, maybe I can make a better chart showing how I laid it out.
Personally I think you have too many signifiers in your army: white helmets, black helmets, white stripes, red stripes, white/black pauldron rims... Good thing you paint to this fantastic level and we get to see all these in reality!
Yeah, they are basically organized exactly like the Dark Angels. I ran out of gas when it came to that portion. Plus it makes the Codex easier to implement. So I'm lazy in that respect.
And to be absolutely fair, this was hardly a detailed force organization - it was more like markings of the Chaopter. I'd like to see the relative hierarchy in the Chapter, how does the Inner Circle works, how is your Chapter different than the Dark Angels? Maybe you want to consider the option (in conjunction with making Akhundas the homeworld) of dedicating the companies to certain Akhundasian clans - a bit like the Salamanders... You already have established a rivalry between the clans - the 3-9 companies might actually been directly drawn from corresponding clans from Akhundas while the 1st and 2nd will be where the clan lineage is phased out completely and the hunt of the Fallen becomes the only conisderation worth... ermm... considering!
Don't really want to have anything continue to be devoted to the clans, they are supposed to shed that type of animosity before they leave the 10th Company. Plus they all wouldn't have any clan affiliation, because not all of the Marines are from Akhundras II. Even the ones wearing robes aren't all from there. The Chapter is more a 1000 strong brotherhood, tying all the clans together even in times of strife, etc.
Glad you like, but the Deathwalker one is basically a rip off of at least three other book series. It also gives a "cover story" for the broken sword of the Deathwalker company. I like the changing of the ritual, but here's a thought... What if the belief was actually seeded in their culture to be used by the Emperor/a Primarch later. Perhaps a "Reverend Mother" once walked the surface of Akhundras sowing the seeds of a belief to later be exploited when a fighting force was needed. (What can I say, I like to steal story elements)
Excellent ritual mate, Deathwalk! This is trully for the toughest to survive! I also like the changeing of the menaing over the years (somethign that happens in actual life too) and from something associated with criminal behavior it becomes as point of honour and a "coming of age" ritual! And the Boneseekers legend's cool too! A bit metaphysical - it bodes well with understanding the nature of the Hunt.
Look, I really think you've put tons of effort in the background and it shows. I think Akhundas is for all intents and purposes IS the homeworld of the Stone Burners. Make it so!
I'm glad you appreciate my weaving of various stories, concepts and myths from different books. Wish I could say the ideas were mine, but not much was. . Akhundras II will forever be the spiritual home of the Stoneburners Chapter.