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The Unholy Chosen


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Origins


The Primaris Legion had been protecting the Draco system for thousands of years, and were loved by the people they served. Countless ork, chaos, and eldar raids had been stopped dead in their tracks, and many of the worlds lived in peace almost unknown to other regions of the Imperium.
Eventually, in 988 M40, the Draco system was invaded by a chaos army, and Cane, captain of the first company, was charged with the defense of Argin II, an agri-world that was the main target for the invaders. In his charge were 3rd company and 7th company (which was the reserve company that consisted of the devastators). Sent to advise him was the Chief Librarian Sazier.
Cane, who had mastered the art of defense long ago, quickly defeated the chaos invaders. The people began to hail him as the Savior of Draco, and indeed, many marines who had witnessed the victory began loving him more than even the chapter master. He did however, deny that he was so worthy of the praise.
That is, until the battle of Detori. When the Ork invasion of Detori had crippled the supply lines of the region, Cane and his company, along with the 4th and 8th companies, and many of the newer recruits, as well as Sazier again, had been sent to deal with the situation.
The battle was fierce, and many had died, including the strike force's chaplains, and many of the sergeants. Without the propper guidance of the chaplains, the morale of the astartes began to fall, and they had lost their zeal. Realising this, Cane began his own fiery sermons during battle, and soon the zeal was renewed, only this time, not for the Emperor, but for him. Sazier had completely supported this, and had actually hoped for it, for ,since Argin, he had begun dark studies with the recovered chaos book, Greskall's Praise.
Though the loyalty of his men were to him, he did not yet break his loyalties to the Emperor. He began feeling as though all of the victory was because of his own might and judgement. Sazier himself spoke to him as if he was the Chapter Master, and told him of the loyalties of the men. He then said that their chapter master, Lord Veyer would be the one to achieve credit for the victory. At first, Cane did not believe, but when the celebrations of the world were called Veyersday, he flew into a rage, saying, "I fight for the Imperium and sacrifice my blood so that they may live, yet they celebrate Lord Veyer!"
Cane knew that he had the love of the veteran first company, as well as the 4th, 5th, 7th, and 10th company captains, as well as Sazier. The 10th company captain, who trained the recruits, began slowly switching their loyalties to Cane after the chaplains were found dead, and those that were not dead were off fighting in some campaign. Yet none suspected Cane, nor Sazier, and no one would forsee his betrayal.

When the time came, 20 years later, it came upon the battle of Ayen. A major chaos invasion of traitor Imperial Guard had besieged Ayens capital hive. In its defense was Lord Veyer, Sazier, Cane and his first company, and 2nd, 3rd, 4th, 8th and 10th companies. The order to start the rebellion started when Cane put his pistol to the back of Veyer's head and pulled the trigger. The resulting civil war resulted in the near destruction of the loyalists and one half of the traitors.
When word reached the fortress monastary, the 5th and 7th company captains opened fire on the unsuspecting loyalists. After several hours, the loyalists managed to secure what they could of the gene-seed and retreated off world to meet up with the battered survivors on the outermost part of the Draco Sector, reforming their survivors into two companies.
The traitors renamed themselves the Unholy, and regrouped at the fortress monastary, where they then met with the chaos general Wilhelm.

Orginazation


The betrayal was not without its cost, and the traitors themselves had sustained heavy casualties. Like the loyalists, only about two companies could be made with what they had left, and there were vertually no assault marines that survived. To boost their numbers, they immediately began recovering what they could of their gene-seed. They also sent out communications to all nearby chaos warbands, promising power for loyalty. Many replied, and the Unholy were broken into two groups, the First Chosen, and the Second Chosen.
The First Chosen were those who were formerly part of the Primaris Legion, and they were led by the former 10th company captain Galagus. The second were led by a chosen from each of the dark gods, who had bested the lords of the warbands in combat.

Each leader was part of Cane's Circle, and had a specific task.
Galagus, the captain of the First Chosen, was to recruit and rebuild the chapter.
Sazier, the Sorceror Lord, was Canes advisor.
Beltibub, Captain of the Plagued, would spread plague and pestilence, as well as lead the followers of nurgle.
Calzer, Speaker of the Gods, would preach to the servants of chaos, spreading the word of the dark gods.
Karnick the Thirsty, Keeper of the Berserked, would lead the followers of Korne into war.
Wilhelm, Lord General of the Unholy Army, would recruit those unfit to be space marines for the Chaos Imperial Guard armies.

The Unholy Chosen's First Chosen were divided into groups of 50, and each group was given a dark name, and assigned to specific armies. The second chosen, after having proved their loyalties, were divided up amongst the armies as well, but were given the secondary tasks that the First Chosen would not take. This caused quite a bit of competition between them.

Each group of the First Chosen had one half of its troops armed with heavy weaponry, and because of the 7th reserve company being the devastator company and mainly unscathed during the rebellion, the Havoc Marines were as common as the chaos marines. Each group also had 10 chaos terminators, as the first company and chapter armories had fallen to chaos, so they had all of the suites.

Each of Cane's 5 personal guards, who were his former battle brothers of the first company, were also armored in Terminator Armor, and were considered the most elite of the chosen.

The Burning of Draco and the Draco Crusade


With the betrayal passed and the pact made with the traitor armies, Cane began conquering the Draco system. World after world fell to him, and within a few years the entirety of the Draco sector had fallen to chaos. Cane ruled from his Flagship, the battlebarge Wrath, and billions were sacrificed.
The Primaris Legion's pleas for a crusade were finally answered, 10 years later, with the administration declaring the Draco Crusade. The crusade, however, would take another 15 years to be launched with full numbers.
During the time before the crusade, the Primaris Legion did what it could to slow the attacks, but hatred is not enough for 2 companies in the face of an entire force. Both sides vowed they would not parish until they saw eachother dead.

Beliefs


The Chosen as a whole are chaos undivided. However, they have forces dedicated to each god, and the individuals are not denied the power to choose.
However, Slannesh is the least favoured amongst the Astartes of the Unholy, who see him as too gaudy.
Every week, the Astartes of the Chosen are given a slave, and on the final day of the week, Cane's Day, the slave is sacrificed, and replaced by a new one. Each slave then has their skin removed, and will be used to be fashioned into robes. The next slave then has to wear that robe. Each time the robe gets bigger, and when it is large enough, the robe is fitted to the Space Marine, who then starts the process anew. What is left of the meat is feasted on, and the blood to bathe in.

Colors


The Chosen, both the First and Second, are all known to go into combat wearing their flesh robes. Those in Cane's Circle, however, did not wear the flesh of their slaves, but instead, the flesh of their former brother captains.
Cane himself war not a robe, but a cape made from the flesh of his former chapter master, Lord Veyer. He dawns the field in Terminator Armor decorated in the symbols of chaos and splattered in blood. Chained to him are his slaves and victims, who are forced to watch as he massacres their families and friends.

Before the Betrayal
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After the Betrayal
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Devastator After the Betrayal Wearing Flesh
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After the Betrayal
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Edited by Telanicus, 18 March 2011 - 09:16 PM.

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I like it, but as they have only turned to Chaos recently, alot of the forces would have Mk.VII armour, and not many at all would have the true Chaos armor, yet. So maybe you could have the Second Chosen out of renegade arnour, while having the First Chosen wear Mk.VII armour.

When it is large enough, the robe is fitted to the Space Marine


How do you plan to show this and do the Second Chosen wear this, or just the First?
Do Terminators and Dreadnoughts wear this?
Do Chaplains and Libarians wear this?
Also, a nice way to show this for Cane and any other specials (Galagus, Sazier, etc.) is to have some chained imperial guard/civillian chained to their masters, wearing one of the skinned robes, or maybe not have a robe, as their master just got a fresh one. ;)

The Unholy Chosen's First Chosen


Probaly better off saying 'The First Chosen...' so there arent so many Chosens.

Each group also had 10 chaos terminators


Each squad, or the First and Second Chosen?

Each of Cane's 15 personal guards were also armored in Terminator Armor


Might be me, but sounds like to many bodyguards, especially seeing as they could use those termie suits for the First Chosen Vets.

The Primaris Legion had been protecting the Draco system for thousands of years


Not possible, the 26th founding was in 738.M40. Thats only one thousand, not thousands

Cane began his own fiery sermons during battle, and soon the zeal was renewed


Not 100% sure, but I think only Chaplains are allowed to do this.

Lord Veyer, Sazier, Cane and his first company, and 2nd, 3rd, 4th, 8th and 9th companies


Cane only had the 4th Company loyal to him (at the fight), so would he be able to defeat 5 whole companies with just 1? Even though were veterans, I dont see them winning with many men left...
Maybe swap out the 9th company with the 10th, as this would be more logical as:
1. Lord Veyer wants to train the scouts in fighting Chaos, and resisting their foul Magick. :huh:
2. This would make Cane and 1st Company taking on 5 others more believable.

Other then that, looks awesome like the colour scheme.


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You may want to go with an earlier founding ... that just sounds like alot to happen in a few hundred years.

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Good ideas.

I am going to cut down the body guard to 5, and swap the 9th with the 10th companies. I think I might also make 4th company loyal to Cane. The only problem is that now there are three loyalists on the fortress monastary and 1 traitor (though they are the most heavy armed). I guess they also have the element of surprise.

For the color scheme and armor, I was also thinking that. My original idea was to have one pre-betrayal, one Mk VII after the betrayal, and one Renegade for the few who had gotten them.

Only the First Chosen's bands would have the 10 terminators. The others would have whatever they came into his service with.

So here is an example of how the first chosen's group is set up.

Cane does not wear the robes of flesh made from the slaves, but instead wears a cape of flesh made from Lord Veyer.
I will go more into this on the post.

Thank you for the insight!

Gasikul

25 Havoc/devastator marines
15 Chaos space marines
10 Chaos Terminators

P.S.
Also, normally only chaplains would give the battle sermons, but because they all died and the righteous zeal was dwindling, he broke the normal rules and began preaching. It was a spur of the moment, "I'm going to save the day." thing.

Edited by Telanicus, 18 March 2011 - 06:09 PM.

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You may want to go with an earlier founding ... that just sounds like alot to happen in a few hundred years.


I agree with Ecritter, make it a earlier founding.


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I did when I edited it.

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