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The Black Shrine - homebrew fluff


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Mine is going through a process of active revision and rewriting.  Names, dates, and particular circumstances are all very likely to change - names in particular.  Still, as things currently stand:
 

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EDIT: like I said, revision is ongoing and names especially are likely to change. Folmarv -> Regulus -> Praesepe -> Al' Debarán -> the Follower (this name probably (actually maybe this time) final, but others still likely to change). Also Bordelon -> Josephus (told you more changes were coming).
 
EDIT 2: If any one happens to like this fluff, and is interested in incorporating it into their own army's fluff, the Black Shrine is always recruiting new war bands.  If your commander proves worthy of bearing one of the Heavenly Stones, they may even be officially inducted into the order of the Shrine Knights, granting you access to the secrets of the Black Shrine's inner circle.


Edited by malisteen, 01 December 2015 - 12:02 AM.

from Shame and Shadow recast, in Black and Gold reborn.


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Makes sense . Abadon would probably support them ,  but not openly . One one thing he wouldn't be linked to one force , so wouldn't antagonise other factions both within and outside his legions and he could use the Shrien as another enforcment/control tool. He wouldn't even have to order them around , being the incarnation/avatar/seed of a new chaos god any action that would oppose him would be an action against the new god . They would be doing his work without him having to control them and be linked with them.

Abadon actions could easily be explained to some as the work of a new god , old gods or something which is his own will. All the factions would keep each others in check , every action he does could be seen as an argument to any side .

It would give him huge control over the BL an affiliated forces.

 

Very good fluff.


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This is an interesting concept, but one thing stands out as either problematic or unexplained: the constellations.

 

 

The constellations as we know them are based on the view of the stars from the perspective of Terra. The same stars viewed from any other location are arranged differently.

 

For the constellations you've named to work, the source of the cult/shrine would have to be on Terra (which works, but might require some more background information). Alternately, if the background you have in mind for the cult/shrine is set in the Eye of Terror, you may want to consider re-naming the constellations.


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Jeske: Thanks for the kind words.  The black shrine cult, the way it functions within the Black Legion, and Abaddon's thoughts about and response to it, are he original bits in the above, so I'm particularly pleased that you thought highly of that portion.

 

Brule:  The constellations simply provide the names of the stones - they're legacy hold over from the source material from which the above is ripped largely wholesale from, repeated here just to give and idea of the design theme behind the daemons, and are not particularly significant to the concept overall.  It's not too significant a detail, so I'm inclined to leave it for legacy value, though it could just as easily be dropped.

 

Alternatively, the zodiac connection could be incorporated into the narrative more directly.  Perhaps the 12 stones were discovered in a single Pandora's Box-like cache or vault on pre-historic Earth, and their order came to be associated with the zodiac there.  After searching for centuries for their master - working behind the scenes to push industry to strip the world bare, ostensibly in pursuit of natural resources but in truth only seeking the thirteenth stone - they eventually determined that the stone was not on Earth and had been exiled to some other world.  So they turned their influence to pushing for space exploration and colonization, whispering the secrets of warp travel to mortals to enable humanity's initial expansion.  When the dark age hit, they were all scattered throughout the galaxy in a Holy Grailesque search for their master's stone, and the sudden and unexpected collapse of human society left them trapped on isolated colonies, to become petty gods or simply be forgotten and return to hibernation when the local populace died out, leaving them without hosts or blood sacrifices.

 

 

edit: man, that's a lot of typos and grammar errors up there, gonna have to take some time to fix that when I get back from work....


Edited by malisteen, 09 November 2013 - 02:03 PM.

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I like it a lot; it fits in nicely with the manner in which the Black Legion is currently portrayed and also with Abaddon as a character: I can certainly see him fostering this kind of devotion in his warriors, so long as it ultimately serves his ends. There's also some interesting shades and depths going on underneath the surface story; demonstrating how multi-faceted the agendas at work within the Black Legion as a whole are.


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Thanks!  I'm rather liking how its shaping up, though at the moment it's a bit too...  I don't know, clear?  Overt?  I think I'll change it somewhat or add something so that the story of the Lucavi and the Shrine Knights is simply how events are understood by the daemons and warriors of the Black Shrine's inner circle, and add some ambiguity by implying the possibility that the Lucavi legend itself might be a lie, or if true that the daemons possessing the shrine knights might not be the Lucavi themselves, but rather daemonic spirits using the legend of the Lucavi to attract other rebellious daemons to their cause.  Maybe imply that even the Shrine Knight hosts might not know the truth, and that it's difficult to get straight answers from the Lucavi themselves - Hashmalum speaks only in commands, Mateus only in lies, Shemhazai's whispers always conceal their true meaning, Kaos speaks with an unintelligible profusion of voices, Ultimecia only in prideful boasts and fawning self praise, Zalera speaks only to the dead, Zeromus only to the imminently deceased, Famfrit never speaks at all, etc.  Maybe add some ties to Malice cults, and imply that the leader of the Lucavi might not be Drachnyen, but rather the rebellious demonic entity and self styled fifth god of chaos Malal.  Or both.  Or neither.


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