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-= The Order of the Abyss =-


"May all that is lost, be found" - Sister Adriana Oldrich

 

The Battle Sisters of the Order of the Abyss are a Lesser Order Pronatus that split from the Order of August Vigil subsequent to the events that followed the destruction of the imperial oceanic mining planet Nahmu. Born out Despair, the Order protected the ancient  space station known simply as the Ark. The Order is now charged with discovering and retrieving the Ark of Truth so that it may reveal all that is lost from the Imperium.

-=Origin =-


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"She who has a why to live for can bear almost any how." - Sister Nina Marian
 

M37.207 The Order of August Vigil of the Order Pronatus were asked by the Ecclesiarchy to investigate whether the large battle station sized saviour pod currently laying on the ocean floor of Nahmu is from the Ark of Truth and whether it contains information on how to find it.

 

Nahmu, was once one of the finest oceanic mining worlds in the Imperium. In lower gothic the name translates as ‘Old Mother’ it was characterised by unique hive cities that would submerge onto the ocean floor to mine for precious minerals during slack water and would then process them above water during the rest of the time.

 

The Ark of Truth according to ancient scripture is supposed to be the resting place for some of mankinds long forgotten, finest relics, as well as an archive capable of locating of trove more. Under the command of Canoness Abeni Aingeal, sisters from the order of August Vigil boarded the space station submerged deep below one of Nahmu’s many oceans, to find life support fully operational but, incapable of self-sustained flight. Deep within its vaults laid the ancient; Vengeance Engines in full working order. While it was an exceptional discovery and warranted further investigation in the name of the emperor, it could not locate the Ark of Truth, with it only containing the last known location before it separated. Without a name they simply started referring to it as the Ark.

 

In the years following the sisters tirelessly continued to research and study the Ark in hopes in one day returning it to the Ecclesiarchy that was until M37.212 when the planet Nahmu started experiencing freak geological activity, so violent that it began tearing itself apart. Before the final cataclysmic event destroyed the planet for good Canoness Abeni Aingeal diverted all power to the stations shields in hope of it surviving the event, the result, the huge amounts of energy hurtled the Ark into the black void of space.

 

The Order of August Vigil assumed their fellow sisters dead and the Ark lost. For those upon the Ark, they had nothing but the ships automated life support, artificial environment, and trajectory. So until the surviving sisters gained control and reinitializing offline systems they were left hurtling uncontrollably into the empty vacuum of space. As they floated in the blackness of nothing it was not long before they came to the attention of roaming Ork Pirates. Sisters from the Order of the Valorous Heart who had been assigned as a protection detail as part of their penance for their sin of pride. These sisters would go on to repel the first attempted boarding action and then onto training the Sisters of the August Vigil the important combat tactics in order to survive. These lessons would prove to be invaluable, as under the command of Canoness Abeni Aingeal,over the next dozen years they were assailed multiple times from Eldar Corsair, and Rogue Trader but they survived and eventually were able to return home.

 

-= Early History =-

 

Returning home to the Order of August Vigil having been declared untainted, their sisterhood struggled to recognise them, they were far darker, they had gone into the Abyss and returned. They weren't Sisters of August Vigil any more, their journey had turned them into something far darker. It was clear to command that they weren’t able to reassimilate, so it was decided that the survivors were to form a new convent on the Ark. This would not be enough to ease tensions for on Lethe, the survivors would disobey orders and break rank. Within the private museum of the planetary governor, laid the Red Necklace of Chirosius, the bloodstained chain with which Apostate Cardinal Bucharis bound Confessor Dolan with. Sisters from the Order of August Vigil had intended to negotiate and trade for it, but the sisters upon the Ark would have none of it. Launching a brutal and bloody assault, slaying all in their path the survivors took the necklace by force. Upon investigation into the incident, the Inquisition would clear the sisters of any wrong doing having discovered the governor had been a mutant and agent of Slaanesh. By this point the tension between the Order and the convent upon the Ark was untenable and with the rather begrudging blessing from the Canoness’ of both the Order of August Vigil and the Valorous Heart, Cardinal Halfleikr Pomorac authorized the convent to separate and form a new order. The new order was named the “Order of the Abyss” and took Nahmu as their home planet in name only, for the Ark would be their mobile convent and their flagship. The order was tasked with unlocking the Arks secrets, so that they may find the Ark of Truth.

 

-= Notable Sisters =-

 

In their relatively short history, the Order of the Abyss have an astounding recording for remarkable individuals

 

-=  First Canoness Abeni Aingeal =-


"In the depths of despair, I found him" - Abeni Aingeal, First Canoness of the Order of the Abyss

First Canoness Abeni Aingeal from the Order of the Abyss, formerly from the Order of August Vigil prior to M40.212 would have been considered an understated leader among her sisterhood. The events that followed Nahmu, in the face of extreme adversity Abeni transformed all of that. As a leader she maintained the Emperors light among her subordinates so that they would not face the despair alone. She showed incredible ingenuity to solve the challenges thrown at them. Having led her sisters for so long in confinement, she was eventually able to led them in battle where she revealed a fiery passion, that her sisters follow without hesitation.

 

-= Current Canoness Superior Eliska Ludmila =-

 

"Now, Emperor be praised, that to believing souls gives light in darkness, comfort in despair." - Eliska Ludmila, Canoness of the Order of the Abyss

 

Orphaned when her father was press ganged into service of the Imperial Navy, she was sent to the Schola Progenium of Gabchik Kubish, at Bohemia, where she grew recognition as a steely eyed servant of the emperor, with a nerve of steel and an unrelenting desire to serve. The Narva offensive is the largest operation her Order has committed too and it has seen her tested. Lord Inquisitor Alexei de'Ossmann is wary of her, as she is not who he had hoped she would be when he approached the order to assist in the battle against the Tau Empire.

 

Gabchik Kubish was a member of the Bohemia Planetary Defense Force. When the Daemon Prince Reinhardrik manifested within the planetary governor's palace, Guardsman Kubish participated in efforts to reclaim the palace and execute any heretics present. The Daemon Prince's powers forced technological devices to fail- including the loyalist guardsmen's weapons,, which allowed Reinhardrik to slaughter them at his leisure. In desperation, Guardsman Kubish used a Holy Orb of Antioch- a gift from a Space Marine of the Black Templars Chapter, mistaken for common jewelry and displayed in the palace for millenia- to exorcise the Daemon Prince, giving his life in the process.

 

In death, Gabchik Kubish was named a martyr, an Imperial Saint, and namesake of Bohemia's Schola Progenium. Shrapnel from the Holy Orb was recovered and then inlaid into the guide bar of an ornate chainsword, which was named Beastbreaker. Bohemia's planetary governor granted Eliska Ludmila the honor of bearing the weapon in battle, after the Order of the Abyss returned to the Imperial fold; every day, she fights to prove herself worthy of it.

 

-= Beliefs =-

 

Due to the nature of the Orders missions and tasks, they encounter many a tale of heretical crimes, all of which is recorded within the Testament of the Martyrs of Faith, so that once the Ark of Truth is discovered they may take up retribution against those that defile the name of the Emperor. Having constant contact with artefacts and relics has made the Order particularly lax about the worship of the god emperor through totemic representation. This has caused some friction with other more conservative Orders. This belief has held them in good stead, not being dragged into ideologically charged retributive campaigns and has allowed them to stay on their mission.  

 

It is not the only belief that has caused controversy among other orders. Other orders commonly distain the blatant relationship between them and the Adeptus Mechanicus, for it is usual sight to see Techpriest accompany sisters upon missions to authenticate technological artifacts.

 

The founding sisters of the Order passed on their incredible will to survive but, over time sisters of the order have grown to believe that mere survival is not enough. One must not only endure the toughest of trials but also better them. To be a Sister of the Abyss, one must learn that lesson well and truly - to strive against all odds to win, and to be prepared to throw away victory and even their very lives for the ideals they will spend the rest of their lives fighting for. That way no sisters death is in vain and the dozen years trapped upon the Ark will have had a purpose.

 

 

-= Combat Doctrines =-


"We return light to that left in the dark" - Sister Ludvik Vit
 

All sisters from the Order of the Abyss have a wide range of individual specialisations when it comes to the study, investigation, and research into ancient relics and artefacts. On the battlefield the order has become specialised an a few polarised aspects of conflict due to the nature of the tasks. They are specialised in lightning raids and drop assaults in order to secure information or items, as well as rear-guard operations in order to defend and guard them.

 

Due to having the unique access to the vaults upon the Ark, the Order is able to deploy numerous ancient machines to aid in their missions. Reports have stated seeing Vengeance Engines upon the battlefield. An ancient machine resembling somewhere between that of a Penitent Engine from the Ecclesiarchy and that of an Dreadknight of the Grey knights. All indicators point to the fact that these machines are the same as those being deployed by the Order of the Desert Rose.
 

Confession suits have been seen marching and deploying alongside the sisters of the order.  These exo suits originate from mining the mining equipment used to extract artifacts deep underground. The Order saw promise in these suits as did the Adeptus Mechanicus who quickly sought to strap an array of heavy weaponary onto them, making them walking tanks with formidable firepower; mass-collapsing grav-weaponary, infantry shredding heavy bolters, or armour piercing lascannons. Confession suits get their name from the belief that they are able to engage their enemies from such a distance with such ferocity that by the time they have reached you, if you are lucky enough still to be alive, you will confess. They are indeed one of most powerful assets that the Order has available, an asset many orders wish they had. More recent reports have spoken of an unidentified machine that bares similar resemblance to that of the Adeptus Astartes Dark Angel Chapter’s Nephilim Jetfighters providing air cover for the order, further investigation is needed to confirm

 

-= Notable Engagements =-


"There is no Artifact not worth shedding blood for! " - Sister Tamara Vratislav
 

Since its establishment, the lessons learnt from the dozen years trapped upon the Ark have stood in good stead.

 

-= The 2nd Red Crusade =-

 

M38 in the Grail Abyss, the Grail had gone missing. Centuries of requests to examine this grail in the belief in contains clues to the whereabouts of the Ark of Truth had been denied, if the order could recover it before the Grail Wardens, they hoped to unearth a vital clue in their quest.

 

MORE COMING SOON

 

-= Battle for Sirens Gate =-

 

M39.273, Sedlec Ossuary, at the battle for Sirens Gate, the Order of the Abyss became bogged down against swathes of heretics. The heretics forces must be broken and the gate taken for within the masonry of the gate the order believed laid a clue to unlocking the silent vault within the Ark. Order was given to deploy the Confession suits. The suits strode into battle and from a far they pounded their enemies positions. Bloody havoc was bought upon their enemies that day. Their fiery rain hastily destroying the heretics so that their fellow sisters could secure the gate and the vital information could be secured.

 

-= Krakens Mouth =-

 

In return for information regarding the Ark of Truth, Lord Inquisitor Alexei de'Ossmann required that the Order dispose of the traitoris planetary governor of Vitus held up in the palace at Krakens Mouth. The Order determined that they best way to achieve this would be through an orbital assault, led by their Vengeance Engines. The understanding was that the orbital drop would enable the Engine to quickly unleash its dual heavy flamers and engage in the close quarters fighting that would inevitably ensue. Its smaller profile would allows it to negotiate the tight passageways around the palace that a regular armoured vehicle would be unable to navigate past. At the east entrance to the palace, sisters were ambushed by the remaining troops loyal to the governor, they overran their position. Supported by a Vengeance Engine with its additional mobility it was able to engage the enemy and push back the assault, had it have been one of the rhino chassis based vehicles available, it would have easily have been destroyed, leaving the sisters vulnerable and most likely lost.

-= The Narva Offensive =-

 

999.M41 at the request of Lord Inquisitor Alexei de'Ossmann arrive on Narva to assist in combating the Tau Empire and retrieving the Magma-core Syphon the former auxiliary power supply to the Ark of Truth and currently under investigation by the Earth Caste of the Tau Empire


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Let the Galaxy Burn includes a short story in which Imperial Guardsmen use a drop pod to attack a seceding planetary governor's palace. It's possible the author was mistaken, and the Imperial Guard (Astra Militarum) aren't allowed to use drop pods; but if the author is not mistaken, then the Adepta Sororitas can certainly use them.

 

As for Dreadnoughts and Centurions, I see no problem with converting a Sentinel so it has a Penitent Engine's arms, or with replacing a Penitent Engine's flamers with heavy bolters. Feel free to ask sedibear for permission to use the name Vengeance Engine for this Sentinel variant.


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Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.

 

Reasons to use the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think the Librarian Dreadnought needs Furious Charge AND It Will Not Die to beat down a Chaos-worshiping punk and his Defiler, while a Stormraven needs a Vanquisher cannon to beat down this punk's Heldrake.


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Let the Galaxy Burn includes a short story in which Imperial Guardsmen use a drop pod to attack a seceding planetary governor's palace. It's possible the author was mistaken, and the Imperial Guard (Astra Militarum) aren't allowed to use drop pods; but if the author is not mistaken, then the Adepta Sororitas can certainly use them.

 

As for Dreadnoughts and Centurions, I see no problem with converting a Sentinel so it has a Penitent Engine's arms, or with replacing a Penitent Engine's flamers with heavy bolters. Feel free to ask sedibear for permission to use the name Vengeance Engine for this Sentinel variant.

Thank you, thats really helpful

 

From my understanding, a new Order is formed by splitting off from an already established order. Now would they ever change type, e.g Sabine to Militant?


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The fluff is good, so far. More details are needed regarding the "projector" that caused the Ark to transport the Sisters so far from home, though. Did the Ark still have functional propulsion and navigation systems, which- once Nahmu's destruction launched the Ark into space- reactivated and then guided the Ark towards some "rendezvous point" before the Sisters regained control? And what happened to the Ark after the Sisters made contact with Imperial forces? Did they anchor the Ark to a planetary surface to prevent it from leaving again, or are they going to repair the Ark's propulsion systems and then use it as a battleship and mobile convent?

 

Does the Order use Confession suits and Vengeance Engines in different environments, e.g., the Confession suits serve as heavy support (especially in confined environments, such as Space Hulks and building interiors, where the Vengeance Engine won't fit) while the Vengeance Engines serve as fast attack? Space Marines players have found the Centurion suit redundant, trying to occupy roles a Terminator and Devastator Squads already occupy; as the Adepta Sororitas don't have Terminators (with the obvious exception of a Lord Inquisitor), the Confession suit can occupy roles the Terminator would otherwise have.


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Wolf Scout- Catachan barking toad eggs+ Thousand Sons Marine= Fun! (Wolves of Catachan)
Sisters of Battle+ Fenrisian Beer- Inhibitions- Sanity= Trouble! (Order of the Blazing Heart Rocket Punch Pimp Magnet She-Wolf)

 

Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.

 

Reasons to use the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think the Librarian Dreadnought needs Furious Charge AND It Will Not Die to beat down a Chaos-worshiping punk and his Defiler, while a Stormraven needs a Vanquisher cannon to beat down this punk's Heldrake.


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The fluff is good, so far. More details are needed regarding the "projector" that caused the Ark to transport the Sisters so far from home, though. Did the Ark still have functional propulsion and navigation systems, which- once Nahmu's destruction launched the Ark into space- reactivated and then guided the Ark towards some "rendezvous point" before the Sisters regained control? And what happened to the Ark after the Sisters made contact with Imperial forces? Did they anchor the Ark to a planetary surface to prevent it from leaving again, or are they going to repair the Ark's propulsion systems and then use it as a battleship and mobile convent?

 

Does the Order use Confession suits and Vengeance Engines in different environments, e.g., the Confession suits serve as heavy support (especially in confined environments, such as Space Hulks and building interiors, where the Vengeance Engine won't fit) while the Vengeance Engines serve as fast attack? Space Marines players have found the Centurion suit redundant, trying to occupy roles a Terminator and Devastator Squads already occupy; as the Adepta Sororitas don't have Terminators (with the obvious exception of a Lord Inquisitor), the Confession suit can occupy roles the Terminator would otherwise have.

Thank you, some serous food for thought. Had not considered most of those aspects. I was going to give the Ark to the order as a mobile convent (Edited above to fix).

 

I was thinking the confession suits as a shooty terminator esq unit.  Mainly because I dont picture SoB with close combat specialist units e.g Thunder hammers, lightning claws etc

 

Edit: Expanded upon most of the information you mentioned, going to try use Notable conflicts as a way to describe the unique assets in action


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Why have an origin story based on the Rock?

 

Why can't they be based on a battleship/battlecruiser? The Imperial fleet have priests and an Ecclesiarchy ship converted into an Adepta Sorroritas nunnery is a great idea and fits the fluff without the Inquisition worrying about a possibly warp tainted bunch of battle sisters.

 

The vessel could become a rapid reaction asset for the Ecclesiarcy.


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Why have an origin story based on the Rock?

I am sorry, I cannot see how its based on the same idea. But I do not know the story of the Rock in incredible detail

 

I also do not want them to be militant



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Why have an origin story based on the Rock?

I am sorry, I cannot see how its based on the same idea. But I do not know the story of the Rock in incredible detail

 

I also do not want them to be militant

 

By "the Rock," Brother Captain Kezef is referring to the Dark Angels' fortress-monastery, which rested on the surface of Caliban (the Legion's home world) before the planet's destruction launched it into space. The reasons why are admittedly different (Caliban was destroyed via orbital bombardment, while Nahmu's destruction seems to be unrelated to the Sisters' presence), but I understand Kezef's POV.


Wolf Scout- Catachan barking toad eggs+ Thousand Sons Marine= Fun! (Wolves of Catachan)
Sisters of Battle+ Fenrisian Beer- Inhibitions- Sanity= Trouble! (Order of the Blazing Heart Rocket Punch Pimp Magnet She-Wolf)

 

Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.

 

Reasons to use the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think the Librarian Dreadnought needs Furious Charge AND It Will Not Die to beat down a Chaos-worshiping punk and his Defiler, while a Stormraven needs a Vanquisher cannon to beat down this punk's Heldrake.


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Nitpick:

The Order determined that they best way to achieve this would be through an orbital assault, led by their Vengeance Engines. The understanding was that the orbital drop would enable the Engine to quickly unleash its dual heavy flamers and engage in the close quarters fighting that would inevitably ensue. Also its lower profile allows it to negotiate lower-ceilinged and tighter passageways that a regular armoured vehicle would be unable to navigate past.

As the Sentinel (and vehicles based on it, e.g., the Penitent Engine) stands taller than a tank, perhaps you meant to use Confession suits instead of the Vengeance Engines in this scene?


Wolf Scout- Catachan barking toad eggs+ Thousand Sons Marine= Fun! (Wolves of Catachan)
Sisters of Battle+ Fenrisian Beer- Inhibitions- Sanity= Trouble! (Order of the Blazing Heart Rocket Punch Pimp Magnet She-Wolf)

 

Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.

 

Reasons to use the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think the Librarian Dreadnought needs Furious Charge AND It Will Not Die to beat down a Chaos-worshiping punk and his Defiler, while a Stormraven needs a Vanquisher cannon to beat down this punk's Heldrake.


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By "the Rock," Brother Captain Kezef is referring to the Dark Angels' fortress-monastery, which rested on the surface of Caliban (the Legion's home world) before the planet's destruction launched it into space. The reasons why are admittedly different (Caliban was destroyed via orbital bombardment, while Nahmu's destruction seems to be unrelated to the Sisters' presence), but I understand Kezef's POV.

 

I know, I can just only see one similarty, something surviving the destruction of a planets surface. If anything I believe it provides precedent to making the Ark surviving more believable.

 

Nitpick:

 

 

The Order determined that they best way to achieve this would be through an orbital assault, led by their Vengeance Engines. The understanding was that the orbital drop would enable the Engine to quickly unleash its dual heavy flamers and engage in the close quarters fighting that would inevitably ensue. Also its lower profile allows it to negotiate lower-ceilinged and tighter passageways that a regular armoured vehicle would be unable to navigate past.

As the Sentinel (and vehicles based on it, e.g., the Penitent Engine) stands taller than a tank, perhaps you meant to use Confession suits instead of the Vengeance Engines in this scene?

No, I guess I have described it badly. I see the Confession suits as walking artillery, the Vengeance Engines as close combat machines. When attempting to describe it, I was thinking it is more able to navigate city streets than say anything on a Rhino chassis. I will work on that aspect

 

I also added Beliefs, wanted it pretty stock SoB to be honest


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Sorry to bump, I could really use help with names and places, anything with [INSERT *****]

 

Edit: Names sorted (Went Czech), just Early History remains


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Orphaned when her father was press ganged into service of the Denizens of the Deep chapter of the Adeptus Astartes, she was sent to the Schola [NAME] at [PLACE]...

How about "Schola Progenium of Gabchik Kubish, at Bohemia"? As you decided to use Czech names for your Order, I chose to name the Schola Progenium after the men who assassinated Gestapo Director Reinhard Heydrich, and the planet after the place where Heydrich died. (Feel free to state the Schola is named after an Imperial saint, who was gave his life to kill an arch-traitor or heretic.)

Due to the nature of the Orders missions and tasks, they encounter many a tale of heretical crimes, all of which is recorded within the [ITEM]...

How about "Testament of the Martyrs of Faith" or "Testament of Sinners and Their Redemption"?


Wolf Scout- Catachan barking toad eggs+ Thousand Sons Marine= Fun! (Wolves of Catachan)
Sisters of Battle+ Fenrisian Beer- Inhibitions- Sanity= Trouble! (Order of the Blazing Heart Rocket Punch Pimp Magnet She-Wolf)

 

Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.

 

Reasons to use the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think the Librarian Dreadnought needs Furious Charge AND It Will Not Die to beat down a Chaos-worshiping punk and his Defiler, while a Stormraven needs a Vanquisher cannon to beat down this punk's Heldrake.


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Orphaned when her father was press ganged into service of the Denizens of the Deep chapter of the Adeptus Astartes, she was sent to the Schola [NAME] at [PLACE]...

How about "Schola Progenium of Gabchik Kubish, at Bohemia"? As you decided to use Czech names for your Order, I chose to name the Schola Progenium after the men who assassinated Gestapo Director Reinhard Heydrich, and the planet after the place where Heydrich died. (Feel free to state the Schola is named after an Imperial saint, who was gave his life to kill an arch-traitor or heretic.)

 

 

Due to the nature of the Orders missions and tasks, they encounter many a tale of heretical crimes, all of which is recorded within the [ITEM]...

How about "Testament of the Martyrs of Faith" or "Testament of Sinners and Their Redemption"?

 

Those are brilliant, thank you *added

 

Just early history to go now


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Nitpick: "... so that once the Ark of Truth is discovered they pay take up retribution against those that defile the name of the Emperor," should be "... so that once the Ark of Truth is discovered they MAY take up retribution against those that defile the name of the Emperor," (emphasis mine).

 

I also wonder what the records are stored in. A mystical book, like the Salamanders' Tome of Fire (see articles on Vulkan He'stan)? An STC storage unit (see articles on the Standard Template Construct), with the Ark of Truth itself a cogitator compatible with this storage device? Or something more radical, e.g., a spirit stone or a wraithbone construct (which, understandably, will draw the attention of Ordo Xenos)?


Wolf Scout- Catachan barking toad eggs+ Thousand Sons Marine= Fun! (Wolves of Catachan)
Sisters of Battle+ Fenrisian Beer- Inhibitions- Sanity= Trouble! (Order of the Blazing Heart Rocket Punch Pimp Magnet She-Wolf)

 

Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.

 

Reasons to use the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think the Librarian Dreadnought needs Furious Charge AND It Will Not Die to beat down a Chaos-worshiping punk and his Defiler, while a Stormraven needs a Vanquisher cannon to beat down this punk's Heldrake.


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So a massive thank you to @Bjorn Firewalker you have really helped me get this IS near completion

 

Nitpick: "... so that once the Ark of Truth is discovered they pay take up retribution against those that defile the name of the Emperor," should be "... so that once the Ark of Truth is discovered they MAY take up retribution against those that defile the name of the Emperor," (emphasis mine).

 

Please nitpick away, I am sure there are many spelling mistakes and the like in there

 

I also wonder what the records are stored in. A mystical book, like the Salamanders' Tome of Fire (see articles on Vulkan He'stan)? An STC storage unit (see articles on the Standard Template Construct), with the Ark of Truth itself a cogitator compatible with this storage device? Or something more radical, e.g., a spirit stone or a wraithbone construct (which, understandably, will draw the attention of Ordo Xenos)?

 

Had not given it much thought to be honest. I guess my initial idea is closest to a STC storage unit



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Loving this project, keep it going!



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Loving this project, keep it going!

Thank you for the encouragement, reconsidering the colour scheme at the moment



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Ok, there's a lot of seriously strange fluff going on here, I'm not sure what you're using for reference.

 

I'll grab just one point for now.

 

Orphaned when her father was press ganged into service of the Denizens of the Deep chapter of the Adeptus Astartes, she was sent to the Schola Progenium of Gabchik Kubish, at Bohemia, where she grew recognition as a steely eyed servant of the emperor, with a nerve of steel and an unrelenting desire to serve. The Narva offensive is the largest operation her Order has committed too and it has seen her tested. Lord Inquisitor Alexei de'Ossmann is wary of her, as she is not who he had hoped she would be when he approached the order to assist in the battle against the Tau Empire.

 

 

Emphasis mine. The Adeptus Astartes (post Great Crusade & Horus Heresy) only take youths, boys of approximately 12 to 13 years old. Just how young do they start having children on this world?

 

I'd easily change it to her father being drafted into the Planetary Defence Forces, then maybe transferred into the Imperial Guard or press-ganged into the Imperial Navy, to have him disappear from her life completely.

 

I do like the idea of the Sororitas being used to in the war against the Tau, when you're also fighting their cultural imperialism, promising a better life for humans working for the Greater Good. Makes sense to fight fire with fire.


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Ok, there's a lot of seriously strange fluff going on here, I'm not sure what you're using for reference.

 

I'll grab just one point for now.

Thank you, thats an easy fix. Please point out more


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The thing that stands out most to me on a skim read would be that the Order of the Blessed Enquiry were technically an offshoot of the Order of Our Martyred Lady who were created specifically to research the nature of Slaaneshi daemons, and who were all wiped out except for a sole surviving Sister - Ephrael Stern.


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The thing that stands out most to me on a skim read would be that the Order of the Blessed Enquiry were technically an offshoot of the Order of Our Martyred Lady who were created specifically to research the nature of Slaaneshi daemons, and who were all wiped out except for a sole surviving Sister - Ephrael Stern.

Good point, luckily another easy fix. I had considering changing founding order because I knew the order of blessed enquiry were destroyed and didnt want my dates to be wrong. Will find another Order Pronatus to swap with

 

Edit: Fixed, swapped to Order of August Vigil


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I think the Canoness deserves a special weapon, a symbol of rank and icon of faith. Here's my idea:

 

 

Gabchik Kubish was a member of the Bohemia Planetary Defense Force. When the Daemon Prince Reinhardrik manifested within the planetary governor's palace, Guardsman Kubish participated in efforts to reclaim the palace and execute any heretics present. The Daemon Prince's powers forced technological devices to fail- including the loyalist guardsmen's weapons,, which allowed Reinhardrik to slaughter them at his leisure. In desperation, Guardsman Kubish used a Holy Orb of Antioch- a gift from a Space Marine of the Black Templars Chapter, mistaken for common jewelry and displayed in the palace for millenia- to exorcise the Daemon Prince, giving his life in the process.

 

In death, Gabchik Kubish was named a martyr, an Imperial Saint, and namesake of Bohemia's Schola Progenium. Shrapnel from the Holy Orb was recovered and then inlaid into the guide bar of an ornate chainsword, which was named [insert name of choice, here]. Bohemia's planetary governor granted Eliska Ludmila the honor of bearing the weapon in battle, after the Order of the Abyss returned to the Imperial fold; every day, she fights to prove herself worthy of it.

 

The [insert name of choice, here] has the following profile:

 

Range -, S x2, AP 2. Melee, Armourbane, Fleshbane, Hatred (Chaos Daemons, Chaos Space Marines), Rampage, Two-handed, Unwieldly.

Fleshbane is from the 6th Edition rules for the Holy Orb of Antioch. Rampage replaces the Blast of the Holy Orb of Antioch.

 

As for the weapon's name, I'm thinking "Beastslayer". ("The Blond Beast" was one of Reinhard Heydrich's nicknames.)

 

Thoughts?


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Wolf Scout- Catachan barking toad eggs+ Thousand Sons Marine= Fun! (Wolves of Catachan)
Sisters of Battle+ Fenrisian Beer- Inhibitions- Sanity= Trouble! (Order of the Blazing Heart Rocket Punch Pimp Magnet She-Wolf)

 

Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.

 

Reasons to use the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think the Librarian Dreadnought needs Furious Charge AND It Will Not Die to beat down a Chaos-worshiping punk and his Defiler, while a Stormraven needs a Vanquisher cannon to beat down this punk's Heldrake.


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I think the Canoness deserves a special weapon, a symbol of rank and icon of faith. Here's my idea:

 

 

Gabchik Kubish was a member of the Bohemia Planetary Defense Force. When the Daemon Prince Reinhardrik manifested within the planetary governor's palace, Guardsman Kubish participated in efforts to reclaim the palace and execute any heretics present. The Daemon Prince's powers forced technological devices to fail- including the loyalist guardsmen's weapons,, which allowed Reinhardrik to slaughter them at his leisure. In desperation, Guardsman Kubish used a Holy Orb of Antioch- a gift from a Space Marine of the Black Templars Chapter, mistaken for common jewelry and displayed in the palace for millenia- to exorcise the Daemon Prince, giving his life in the process.

 

In death, Gabchik Kubish was named a martyr, an Imperial Saint, and namesake of Bohemia's Schola Progenium. Shrapnel from the Holy Orb was recovered and then inlaid into the guide bar of an ornate chainsword, which was named [insert name of choice, here]. Bohemia's planetary governor granted Eliska Ludmila the honor of bearing the weapon in battle, after the Order of the Abyss returned to the Imperial fold; every day, she fights to prove herself worthy of it.

 

The [insert name of choice, here] has the following profile:

 

Range -, S x2, AP 2. Melee, Armourbane, Fleshbane, Hatred (Chaos Daemons, Chaos Space Marines), Rampage, Two-handed, Unwieldly.

Fleshbane is from the 6th Edition rules for the Holy Orb of Antioch. Rampage replaces the Blast of the Holy Orb of Antioch.

 

As for the weapon's name, I'm thinking "Beastslayer". ("The Blond Beast" was one of Reinhard Heydrich's nicknames.)

 

Thoughts?

This is pretty great, just to confirm, can I use this word for word?

I may drop off the weapon profile though

 

Name,based off your suggestion, Beastrender?



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I think the Canoness deserves a special weapon, a symbol of rank and icon of faith. Here's my idea:

 

 

Gabchik Kubish was a member of the Bohemia Planetary Defense Force. When the Daemon Prince Reinhardrik manifested within the planetary governor's palace, Guardsman Kubish participated in efforts to reclaim the palace and execute any heretics present. The Daemon Prince's powers forced technological devices to fail- including the loyalist guardsmen's weapons,, which allowed Reinhardrik to slaughter them at his leisure. In desperation, Guardsman Kubish used a Holy Orb of Antioch- a gift from a Space Marine of the Black Templars Chapter, mistaken for common jewelry and displayed in the palace for millenia- to exorcise the Daemon Prince, giving his life in the process.

 

In death, Gabchik Kubish was named a martyr, an Imperial Saint, and namesake of Bohemia's Schola Progenium. Shrapnel from the Holy Orb was recovered and then inlaid into the guide bar of an ornate chainsword, which was named [insert name of choice, here]. Bohemia's planetary governor granted Eliska Ludmila the honor of bearing the weapon in battle, after the Order of the Abyss returned to the Imperial fold; every day, she fights to prove herself worthy of it.

 

The [insert name of choice, here] has the following profile:

 

Range -, S x2, AP 2. Melee, Armourbane, Fleshbane, Hatred (Chaos Daemons, Chaos Space Marines), Rampage, Two-handed, Unwieldly.

Fleshbane is from the 6th Edition rules for the Holy Orb of Antioch. Rampage replaces the Blast of the Holy Orb of Antioch.

 

As for the weapon's name, I'm thinking "Beastslayer". ("The Blond Beast" was one of Reinhard Heydrich's nicknames.)

 

Thoughts?

This is pretty great, just to confirm, can I use this word for word?

I may drop off the weapon profile though

 

Name,based off your suggestion, Beastrender?

 

The weapon and its backstory are creative writing exercises to me; consider them my gift to you.

 

As for the weapon's name, I decided to recycle the title of a 'Gotrek & Felix' novel. If you have a better idea, feel free to use it.


Edited by Bjorn Firewalker, 02 May 2016 - 09:43 AM.

Wolf Scout- Catachan barking toad eggs+ Thousand Sons Marine= Fun! (Wolves of Catachan)
Sisters of Battle+ Fenrisian Beer- Inhibitions- Sanity= Trouble! (Order of the Blazing Heart Rocket Punch Pimp Magnet She-Wolf)

 

Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.

 

Reasons to use the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think the Librarian Dreadnought needs Furious Charge AND It Will Not Die to beat down a Chaos-worshiping punk and his Defiler, while a Stormraven needs a Vanquisher cannon to beat down this punk's Heldrake.





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