Hail Reolius, I wrote these out before your latest post, so I understand it may not all be relevant to current fluff, bear with me, when I get a chance I'll drop some new questions
1) The eagle on the Enforcer uniform, is this the Raptor’s Head that the Emperor used as his symbol in the Unification wars? Or the Aquila, the symbol of the Terran-Martian based Imperium? If the Aquila, what did they do to earn such an esteemed honour? Fulgrim gave a massive speech, what does your legion do?
2) To clarify, the Legion is not the first response is it? Unless its major threat like that Crimson Walker rebellion on Terra? I mean mortal forces would tackles rebellions first right?
3) Does this legion still part in expansion? Is its sole purpose to act as a rapid reaction force for complaint worlds? If so, why? Seems to be a waste of a legion to me . . .
4) The Riot Shields, tell me more. Are they Storm Shields? Which weren’t developed until the end of the Crusade. Are they Breacher Shields with refractor fields? Which tend to be quite rare and saved for officers in other legions? What's the deal with these shields?
5) I’m not sure the Emperor would order a legion to make a special squad of shield bearing astartes for fighting unruly mortals. I mean, I don’t think he gets that involved with the Legions, he seems to be macro focussed than micro. Also, for the same reason I don’t think he’d be ordering you to be brutal, just as long as you get the job done. I mean if he wanted brutal wouldn’t he send in a legion that is just brutal anyway?
6) Why couldn’t the Captains and Praetors not find a solution to their dilemma? Why not target the leaders and let the mob fall apart? Why not have Iterators sway the masses or incentivise the public to turn rebels in, I mean few people would be able to resist a trained Iterator, those dudes are rarer than astartes. Why not use stasis grenades rather than explosive ones? Why not use Arbites style water cannons than flamethrowers? Why not capture and execute rebels instead of killing everyone? What stopped them? Why not seek to have forge worlds produce the gear you need or ask others for the knowledge you lack? The Emperor is not a valid answer, for reasons mentioned above.
7) The wealthy DS75 didn’t stockpile any of its food? Why not? Seems incredulous
8) How did the underground people manage to kill off orks and not cause more to come? Surely ork deaths would attract more orks eager to see whats killing them, and what happened to the spores ork corpse give off? More orks would be born in the tunnels.
9) *combed to be sure they were not ork spores is what I hope that sentence means
10) Were the underground people eating the orks that the sentinels killed? If not why did the orks think something ate them?
11) I imagine the majority of the population underground were mining to create space for more people, water and livestock rather than for metals
12) Is the Discovery of the lost Primarch section still written for a previous version of Hope? It feels like it, with the focus on hostile orbits and great domes to protect the people and no orks.
13) I don’t buy that the Emperor pushed Reolius back because he was unused to hugs, he makes mistakes but he’s not a total tool, he’s a skilled diplomat. Why would Reolius want to hug him anyway? He’s a gold-plated warrior king half as tall again as Reolius. Also, did the Emperor in the OU ever act in this manner, telling the Primarchs to call him ‘creator’ and revealing he had created them through unnatural means?
14) So the 13th was brought to Hope? And Reolius never went to Terra for an education or was mentored by another Primarch? Not saying this can’t happen, just clarifying. I mean Robigus is the same but for him it mostly happens because two other primarchs are found in the same time frame, so he’s left to it.
15) Did Reolius really expect to be sent off straight away in command of a legion to bring worlds into compliance, when he knows very little of the Imperium or its ways, or even the legion he commands?
16) Quite the ego, naming the legion after himself 😉
17) Weren’t the Pacification squads used as anchors too? You mentioned something about holding off would-be assailants or something (I’m too lazy to scroll back up, my apologies.) And I remember the Pacification squads were central to Enforcer tactics too, so what’s changed? The shields still hold back attackers, the squads still form the core of order of battle, and they still form cover for units on the attack.
18) They ditch the maces? Why? They’re great for caving in ork skulls and cracking eldar ribs. What are these replaced with? If they keep the maces then what exactly did they lose? They still have their shields, their maces, their grenades and grenade launchers, its’ just other people have launchers now too.
19) A tank is faster than a marine, especially one lugging around a shield.
20) Would the ground beneath the fortress have buckled in no-one had dug beneath them?
21) I mean, the majority of siege work is overcoming the walls themselves rather than the ground they’re on. Only sapping focuses on that. So making them sap-proof wouldn’t protect them from artillery fire, or bombing or any form of battering ram or demo charge, or even scaling the walls, or flying over them. All things likely out of Reolius’ initial area of expertise until he gathers info/experience on the matter.
22) This is nitpicking, but I don’t think the Enforcers would have been the most terrifying to a civilian, I mean the Death Bringers were haunting, bloody butchers, the Soul Crushers were heartless and ruthless, the Rust Golems literally kill every man, woman and child (and any pets), the Golden Jaguars are savage in combat, the Brazen Bulls smash everything like the Enforcers did but were mad about it while they did it.
Overall, there’s a nice core concept for the legion, one that obviously comes from the same underground dens as the people of Gurren Lagaan. They’re into defence, they once had their shields facing the people now they have turned 180 to defend those people, (although obviously these won’t be the same people, as the first are insurrectionists that Reolius would still have to fight, and the latter are loyal imperial citizens who need protecting.)
I think you’ve gone in quite hard on the brutal massacre thing, I’m not sure why. Emps would likely leave Legion commanders to their own free will in how to handle the situation and would likely send in a brutal legion if he needed a brutal legion. I don’t see why they have to use brutal tactics over ones that are less brutal. For example why do they have to beat on people who are “too old to run and too young to know”? When they could target rebel leaders, shoot down enemy combatants and the like. I know legions like the Death Bringers and Rust Golems would literally kill everyone, but they didn’t mind it at the time, the Enforcers do. So why don’t they change? Emps isn’t there dictating how they should fight, he’s got better things to do than manage one legion’s affairs. So I think this needs a revision at some stage, if not to a different outcome then at least to a different cause.