Beren Posted August 26, 2019 Author Share Posted August 26, 2019 2. Originally unknown. In his fluff banner I linked it to a situation where he was ordered into a suicidal assault with no chance of success to test his loyalty and ability to survive. The assault fails, but he manages to survive and for his loyalty is promoted to Equerry. The 'disgrace' is a mocking reference to how that assault failed, even though it was never meant to succeed. 6. Related to seas or oceans. 12. Not sure, I was always taught to use them in lists. Looking it up, it seems they're used to override commas when one is present as part of an item in the list. Other edits have been made. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bluntblade Posted August 26, 2019 Share Posted August 26, 2019 I feel like you need a paragraph to convey the nuances within the "disgraced" bit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beren Posted August 26, 2019 Author Share Posted August 26, 2019 I may add more on both him and Hennasohn in that case. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bluntblade Posted August 27, 2019 Share Posted August 27, 2019 Worth doing. I wonder if Borrao might merit Great Warrior status rather than Hennasohn. Actually, are there any canon Legions where those types aren't a First Captain? Besides I think Alajos. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skalpynock Posted August 27, 2019 Share Posted August 27, 2019 Worth doing. I wonder if Borrao might merit Great Warrior status rather than Hennasohn. Actually, are there any canon Legions where those types aren't a First Captain? Besides I think Alajos. Khârn is 8th Captain, I'm not sure Gabriel Santor is a Great Warrior, pretty sure there are better contestants for the title in the Emperor's Children than Julius Kaesoron. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bluntblade Posted August 27, 2019 Share Posted August 27, 2019 I forgot Lucius, who is named in Abaddon's thoughts as one of the Other Eighteen. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
simison Posted September 5, 2019 Share Posted September 5, 2019 [Designs of the Impure Prince] has a word count of 3,653 words. Double-checking the total count... The Under-Worlder and the Over-Worlder - 1124 words Dare - 567 words Preparations - 1,765 Drowned Men - 1,239 words Lights in the Fog - 849 words We're at 8,073 words now, and I'm going to tweak Designs a little bit before I'm satisfied. I believe Beren said his latest story is well over 2,000 words, which means the Drowned have passed the necessary word count. Also, either Slips or Blunt still need to select the stories for the Scion anthology. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beren Posted September 5, 2019 Author Share Posted September 5, 2019 (edited) Rak's doing some editing on my one at the moment. Once that's done I'll do the dramatis personae. Speaking of which, have I done the Bears' yet? Edited September 5, 2019 by Beren Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
simison Posted September 5, 2019 Share Posted September 5, 2019 Iron Bears' line-up.... Of Bears and Predators - 5,201 words Warsong - 2,786 words A Proper Depiction - 1,233 words The Gatekeepers of Progress - 1,712 words War-Tales - 2,703 words Ritual Union - 730 words Laeran - 2,761 words So, the big problem is that Blunt likes to write about legions mixing it up with the Bears. Which makes it really confusing on how to label them since he keeps things a bit too balanced. The 'clean' stories adds up to 9,000 words, which is just a thousand shy. I suppose since the Scions have so many options, we could utilize Laeran without qualm. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beren Posted September 6, 2019 Author Share Posted September 6, 2019 You've missed Memories, which is 2,111 words and is in the Stories thread. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bluntblade Posted September 6, 2019 Share Posted September 6, 2019 There's a small, introspective piece in the works. Plus I've had a Bears counterpart to Templar in the works forever. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beren Posted September 6, 2019 Author Share Posted September 6, 2019 To be frank, I would've preferred to know that way earlier. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
simison Posted September 6, 2019 Share Posted September 6, 2019 Ah, it was labeled as 'Juggernauts', not as Iron Bears which is why I didn't find it yesterday. Memories will do quite nicely. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beren Posted September 6, 2019 Author Share Posted September 6, 2019 (edited) Dramatis Personae for the Iron Bears Anthology .Dae'rrd Niimkiikaa, Primarch of the VIth Legion-the Iron Bears -Lord Chief R.Damon Redd, Master Slayer, Master of the Fleet, The Iron King -Achille Nibaasiniiwi The Wolverine", 1st Praetor -Torach, Shaman assigned to Clan-Company Tacharian, Clan Undak -Komanch, Warborn assigned to Clan-Company Tacharian, Clan Undak -Kaern, Apothecary assigned to Clan-Company Tacharian, Clan Undak -Kirikka, Forge Master -Saginaw, Legionary, Steel-Horse Company, 3rd Squad -Nimkii, Legionary, Squad Steel Horse Company, 3rd Squad -Lotarra Sarrin, Iron Queen, Fleet Mistress of the Iron Bears -Minerva An'saalmo, Fleet Lietenant of the 2nd Grand Wartribe -Ellen Temeter, remembrancer to the Primarch Dae'rrd -Ar'assa, wife to the Primarch Dae'rrd -Foban Steelwatcher, Borgalder abhuman auxiliary to the Iron Bears, -Nalik Threymorn, Chosen of Honour Guard Brereh in the VIth Legion-the Juggernauts -Camerat, Sergeant -Batik Threymorn, Legionary - We need to double check the use of the term Devastators in the story Warsong. I also noted a few corrections that needed to be made in War-Tales, though I'm not sure if Griff already has the story or not. Edited September 7, 2019 by Beren Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bluntblade Posted September 6, 2019 Share Posted September 6, 2019 I thought I had Torak, not Torach. Could be wrong though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beren Posted September 7, 2019 Author Share Posted September 7, 2019 Double checked, it's Torach. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
simison Posted September 20, 2019 Share Posted September 20, 2019 Blunt, Slips, someone still needs to pick the SH anthology stories. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bluntblade Posted September 20, 2019 Share Posted September 20, 2019 That may well be tricky. There isn't much that's just Scions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
simison Posted September 20, 2019 Share Posted September 20, 2019 Anything worthy from this list? A Line Drawn - 1849 words Scientific Projects - 2770 words Severity - 1194 words The Hunt - 5882 words Once More, With Feeling - 1596 words The Beheading - 3078 words Dinner for Eleven - 956 words The Justice of Salvation - 747 words A Question of Damned Honour - 1000 words Treat it like a Duel - 1293 words Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
simison Posted September 24, 2019 Share Posted September 24, 2019 Dramatis Personae for the Iron Bears Anthology .Dae'rrd Niimkiikaa, Primarch of the VIth Legion-the Iron Bears -Lord Chief R.Damon Redd, Master Slayer, Master of the Fleet, The Iron King -Achille Nibaasiniiwi The Wolverine", 1st Praetor -Torach, Shaman assigned to Clan-Company Tacharian, Clan Undak -Komanch, Warborn assigned to Clan-Company Tacharian, Clan Undak -Kaern, Apothecary assigned to Clan-Company Tacharian, Clan Undak -Kirikka, Forge Master -Saginaw, Legionary, Steel-Horse Company, 3rd Squad -Nimkii, Legionary, Squad Steel Horse Company, 3rd Squad -Lotarra Sarrin, Iron Queen, Fleet Mistress of the Iron Bears -Minerva An'saalmo, Fleet Lietenant of the 2nd Grand Wartribe -Ellen Temeter, remembrancer to the Primarch Dae'rrd -Ar'assa, wife to the Primarch Dae'rrd -Foban Steelwatcher, Borgalderabhuman auxiliary to the Iron Bears, -Nalik Threymorn, Chosen of Honour Guard Brereh in the VIth Legion-the Juggernauts -Camerat, Sergeant -Batik Threymorn, Legionary - We need to double check the use of the term Devastators in the story Warsong. I also noted a few corrections that needed to be made in War-Tales, though I'm not sure if Griff already has the story or not. Ar'assa appears in a story? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beren Posted September 25, 2019 Author Share Posted September 25, 2019 Not really, she's just briefly mentioned. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
simison Posted September 25, 2019 Share Posted September 25, 2019 Is that worth a mention? Also, what stories do we have for the Godslayers? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beren Posted September 25, 2019 Author Share Posted September 25, 2019 Well, I give the name of Primarch's even when they're mentioned in passing (if anything it's more necessary then) so I was just following a similar logic. As for the Godslayers: Setting up the Godslayers' anthology. A Terrible Weight - 437 words (may add more to it). The Terran Way - 4162 words (needs to be edited) Liberators - 448 words A Cordial Welcome - 1109 words (needs to be cleaned up) It's not as bad as I thought it was, but mostly because Beren's The Terrible Way provides quite a bit of lift. At 6,156 words, the Godslayers' anthology is halfway there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheBlindPrimarch Posted September 26, 2019 Share Posted September 26, 2019 Sounds like I have some work to do... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
simison Posted October 1, 2019 Share Posted October 1, 2019 Well, I give the name of Primarch's even when they're mentioned in passing (if anything it's more necessary then) so I was just following a similar logic. Fair enough. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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