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Rapid Fire Challenge: Hunted - January 2020


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Prompt: Hunted (c'mon, it was coming)

Maximum length: 500 words

Deadline: 31 January 2020

Where to post submissions: In this thread

Note - please make sure all submissions adhere to the forum rules. Any entry that breaks one or more rules shall be removed.

 

 


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I accept your challengeyes.gif Let's seehappy.png ...…. In More Fun with Big Blue Space Marine, Spot, the Chaos Hellhound chases and corners Big Blue Space Marine. The fight is onwoot.gif


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Why is this topic so difficult lol! I feel that some of my stories from the previous Rapid Fire Challenge would better fit in the hunted section. I'm working on something though. Hopefully I'll have it posted at the end of my shift today.


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I'm having trouble as well - I think the previous RFC Prompt drained all my "hunter" stuff.

 

Just can't get any ideas!

 

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Madness

 

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Not super happy with this. I think I could do a lot better but I'm just throwing thoughts on paper right now. Anyway, enjoy!


Edited by Aothaine, 22 January 2020 - 01:00 AM.

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I think Madness is well-written, Aothaine. The
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POV is sufficiently descriptive, believable, and able to draw in readers like myself.
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Ahhh, that was the trick: another PoV than the Hunter prompt ^_^


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"Fully dressed in the ancestral Terminator Armour of their Chapter they rise to a new level of battlefield supremacy, a level where monstrous tanks are but playthings of a child, and where Terminators, Daemons and gods stalk as equals." -Thunder and Lightning, White Dwarf 116 (UK)
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I'm trying to think of ways to write about something/someone being hunted without the typical running away troupe. I have another idea I'm working on right now just need to figure out how to put it to paper. But I really like this idea so I am welcoming the challenge.

 

Thank you for the kind words btwbiggrin.png

 

 

Ahhh, that was the trick: another PoV than the Hunter prompt happy.png

 

I'm kind of confused by the statement. Did the story not qualify as hunted? Maybe I didn't write it correctly. I was trying to...

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Edited by Aothaine, 22 January 2020 - 04:45 PM.

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Oh yeah, your submission was fine :tu:  My comment was for the overall discussion.  My bad.


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"Fully dressed in the ancestral Terminator Armour of their Chapter they rise to a new level of battlefield supremacy, a level where monstrous tanks are but playthings of a child, and where Terminators, Daemons and gods stalk as equals." -Thunder and Lightning, White Dwarf 116 (UK)
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woot.gif …… It's not even the end of the month and I'm done. Don't count on this happening very oftenno.gif

 

I give you...….

 

FEAR

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Wow. I might have time to write another story.... How does Spot and Big Blue Space Marine Go for a Run sound?woot.gif woot.gif eek.gif

 

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Edited by Brother Lunkhead, 25 January 2020 - 12:23 AM.

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Excellent work, Brother Lunkhead. Does it depict
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or is it meant to be open to interpretation?

Edited by Bjorn Firewalker, 24 January 2020 - 02:14 AM.

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Warhammer 40,000+ Star Wars- Rian Johnson- Reylo= AWESOME! (Knights of Renaissance)

Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement) or the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.

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Very nice! Loved that it really left things open to interpretation. :D 


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Excellent work, Brother Lunkhead. Does it depict

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or is it meant to be open to interpretation?

 

As to being open to interpretation, I edited over 150 words from the draft before postingsweat.gif......it is nowmsn-wink.gif


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Preysight

 

          Seylan Morr pauses for a brief moment, looking out across the ravaged wasteland stretching into the distance before him. Nothing moves, save for the wisps of smoke coiling from burnt-out tanks and artillery pieces. If not for the helm encasing his head, he knows that he would detect the rich stench of burnt flesh in the air.  

 

          The Cadian 33rd had been unprepared for the ferocity of the recent ambush. Whilst moving the bulk of their heavy siege equipment and vehicles through the narrow Slotte Canyons, they had been caught unawares by the fury of Seylan Morr and his brothers. He smiles at the memory. The night sky had burned with the fire of missiles and plasma, and the ground had quivered under the weight of mortar fire. The Cadian infantry troops had scattered, desperately seeking cover in the recesses of nooks and crannies, to little avail.

 

          On that evening, Seylan Morr had whispered a single word before sprinting down the series of narrow gravel paths leading into the midst of the carnage. Preysight. His helm had obliged, turning the canyon into a patchwork mosaic of light and dark. The Cadians were highlighted against a backdrop of wavering thermal flames, and Morr had hunted amongst them at will. They were his prey, and he the executioner. 

 

          The faint rasp of breath draws the killer’s attention. He slides his archaic bolter to his shoulder, sweeping across the wreckage before him as he quietly fades backwards into the shadow of a wrecked Earthshaker piece. The breathing continues, distinct over the crackle of exploding munitions and shifting metal. His curiosity awoken, Seylan Morr stalks into the heart of the battlefield. Within moments, he finds his prey. The Cadian, no more than a boy, is pinned beneath the weight of a shattered shard of metal. The weight of the piece is slowly killing him, but the soldier labors on nonetheless. A Chimera transport sits abandoned behind the soldier, its ramp still sealed shut. 

 

          Seylan Morr kneels by the Cadian. The boy’s eyes reflect the firelight as they struggle to focus on the figure looming over him.

          ‘Do you fear death?’

 

          Seylan Morr smiles as he speaks the words, the amusement in his voice stolen by the harsh snarl of his vox-speaker.

 

          The man coughs, blood speckling his lips as he struggles to draw in enough air to reply. Seylan Morr offers him no such opportunity, firing two shots from his silenced bolter in quick succession. For a moment, the battlefield is almost silent again. As he rises, something seems different… off, somehow. It takes Seylan Morr a second to realize that the ramp of the Chimera is now lowered. As he raises his bolter, Morr is hammered by a hail of bolt-rounds exploding outwards from within the seemingly wrecked transport. A half-dozen dark shades glide out of the transport. One pauses by the stricken warrior.          

 

          Before he delivers the fatal blow, the shadow kneels by his dying victim.

          ‘Victorus aut Mortiscousin.’


Edited by Tarvek Val, 30 January 2020 - 03:56 AM.

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"Our holy hatred will make us free!" ~Nameless Dark Apostle

 

"Though my guards may sleep and ships may rest at anchor, our foes know full well that big guns never tire." ~Huron Blackheart

 

"You shall stand in midnight clad, your claws forever red with the lifeblood of my father's failed empire, warring through the centuries as the talons of a murdered god. Rise, my sons, and take your wrath across the stars, in my name. In my memory. Rise, my Night Lords." ~Konrad Curze, the Night Haunter

 

"So... How are you?" ~Cyrion, First Claw

 

 


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Good job, Tarvek Val. So your story depicts
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Edited by Bjorn Firewalker, 29 January 2020 - 09:54 PM.

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Wolf Scout- Catachan barking toad eggs+ Thousand Sons Marine= Fun! (Wolves of Catachan)

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Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement) or the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.

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Precisely. I would've made it a bit longer, but I was already barely below the word limit!


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"Our holy hatred will make us free!" ~Nameless Dark Apostle

 

"Though my guards may sleep and ships may rest at anchor, our foes know full well that big guns never tire." ~Huron Blackheart

 

"You shall stand in midnight clad, your claws forever red with the lifeblood of my father's failed empire, warring through the centuries as the talons of a murdered god. Rise, my sons, and take your wrath across the stars, in my name. In my memory. Rise, my Night Lords." ~Konrad Curze, the Night Haunter

 

"So... How are you?" ~Cyrion, First Claw

 

 


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The hunter becomes the hunted...… Well Donethumbsup.gif

 

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Well, I suggested at the beginning of the month I'd write a Big Blue Space Marine storyyes.gif Inspiration hit me late last night. Soooo.....

 

 

Big Blue Space Marine and Spot

Go for a Walk

 

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Hope you liked it...….

 

This story is dedicated to Tinkerbell (June 3, 2003 - January 26, 2020). Our neurotic guardian of the kingdom, and mother to many puppies.


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Excellent work, Brother Lunkhead. My condolences for your family's loss. Loyal pets are a treasure to any household.
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Wolf Scout- Catachan barking toad eggs+ Thousand Sons Marine= Fun! (Wolves of Catachan)

Warhammer 40,000+ Star Wars- Rian Johnson- Reylo= AWESOME! (Knights of Renaissance)

Reasons to use the Steel Crusaders ('Codex: Space Marines' supplement) or the Iron-hearted Angels ('Codex: Blood Angels' supplement): Because you think giving Sternguard Veterans a heavy bolter wtih special issue HEAVY BOLTER ammunition is ALMOST as much fun as shoehorning an Earthshaker cannon into a Land Raider.




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