schoon Posted May 16, 2005 Share Posted May 16, 2005 I'm not 100% happy with this, so I'm very open to suggestions for improvement... From: Lieutenant Primus Gant Duillius Emperor Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Sergeant Alasseo Posted May 16, 2005 Share Posted May 16, 2005 I like the counter-proposal in the addendum, and the sense of outrage Lieutenant Duillius shows is brilliant. I get the image of a slightly overweight, red-faced bloke in his mid-to late 40s writing a letter of complaint. Hidebound cretin... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ironloki Posted May 16, 2005 Share Posted May 16, 2005 Not bad but those of mermaids in the hydroxium tanks Im not sure about this - perhaps use a different analogy :D - something more in line with 40k Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
schoon Posted May 17, 2005 Author Share Posted May 17, 2005 Not bad butthose of mermaids in the hydroxium tanks Im not sure about this - perhaps use a different analogy :D - something more in line with 40k <{POST_SNAPBACK}> I agree entirely. However, have any good alternate suggestions? I was thinking "spirits" ... "courtesans" ... ummmm ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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