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Just a life sing. Was busy with my new work and latley some family emergency. I realized since the last Update i fell back into old habbits with too much from everything and that i bloated the IA unnecsarly up. Till a next more sleek update will take time still, it will cut down here and there and add a bit more flavour to the Equipment. A few ne Battles are on my mind too. It is not dead, but will as said took time until i can bring myself to sit down and start writing again,

Hello again, it took me way longer to took the time and manage to work on this again. Life got derailed 2 years ago and iam slowly on the way to find my feet back firmly. Fell in a rough spot and needed a long time to slowly crawl out. Found new friends and now iam a LotR Tabletop Player =). I worked witth the help of chat gpt, there are some passage i did not complety change. The majority is after a good prompt rewritten to fit my vision. I assume many see it as something difficult, i see it just as a good tool to help me flesh out them more. Afterall all prompts are backed by my handwritten notes (maybe not readable to everyone, my writing sucks). Still i want to be open about its involment in my rework process. More or less i reworked everything, the only not yet are the notable battles. They will follow longer, iam happy to have finshed it more or less for now. Alltough iam now by over 6000 Words, something i will try to reduce again. but this is a battle for later down the road, maybe the next 2 weeks as i worked the last time this year today =) As allways iam happy for all feedback and will try to answer all questions. A blessfull holyday and good year to all of you

I like twist in Chapters. But iam too concerned about the total loyalty to themselves. Maybe reworkt that part, that they think they do the best for the Empire or the Emp himself, and will go if they deemed it necessary against explict order as example. But this Mindset cry for a Inquistor to declare them Traitors.

Hmh and what is if the Kraken Hunt is something new they had to engage in. The Great Rift schocked the Materium badly, possible the Krakens got awakend due this? Just my 2 cents.

Wow nice Artwork. I espically like Samurai Armour parts. I seriously need to look for some art ofr mine projecets too.

Gamiel Ideas sound very nice. Espically with the Shipgraveyard over there world. Something i guess i will copy for myself. I can see a Astartes Chapter to choose desperate measueres to solve there problem. Wargear can be produced local, but Ships are a whole other can of worms. Without proper Yards and a devleoped Forge World, it would be very hard for extensive refits. Therfore it can be good solution, to capture ships at every time and simply cobble it togehter.

The Cultrue Part sound ok. The Doctrine have tow points which in my eyes are contradict your under supplied and insular nature. Teleportain Technolgy is highly advanced and not easy to maintain, you would need good connections to the AM for it sizeable vehicle pool - how do they maintain them? Are they in resoltuion of the points not undersupllied and have build themselves a strong local industial foundation?

And to be fair, i doubt that the DA and Sucessors would overlook this. And to borther a First Founding Chapter scream for trouble.

Due your thematic i would say Deep Sons. Starspawn idk, dosent sound right for me.

You wrote that there original world is destroyed. Was the warp storm a natural event or some foe created it? Would make for a good story about a certain foe. And how did it effect them? Did they carry old traditions on? Maybe pick a culture which you like and use them as a lose frame to build your chapters culture.

I would suggest that the 1st Company may have been lost otherwise the intervention of the BT. And the loss of Terminator Armour would be tremendous and very reasonable to hate the DA Sucessors for the nearly lost of it. Overall iam eager to see more of the Death Watch Part, something i will maybe later add to my Equites Rehnus too in some form. @Björn I was honestly puzzeld what you mean with black legion wanabe. I thought what the f are they smugeling with the Dark Angels? later i understand you meant the BLack Templars.

If the Worlds are old, it is possible that they are already self sufficent and the Terraforming Maschines long borke, or that simmilar to the Culture on the Book of David Weber, Heir of the Imperium. The Civilastion banned technolgy and worship a KI. They use old manuals and tech speech in there Religion. In the books the Imperium used once ball shaped ships, which they covered up as Moons. Maybe they poses such a "Moon" as Monastery, more reasons to not let People sniff around. Even possible that the Ship see the Adepts as "Danger" and activley seek ways to get rid of them. Maybe this allow you some further ideas how to tackle this. Overall a rather good Sci Fi Series.

One Idea towards the Use of Ash from me. Inccoperate s smaal amount in the bolt rounds. So even in Death the Brothers still bring judgement over the foe. Iam sure it can be expanded towards a intrigendt for painting the power armours, Overall i find the idea to origin of a crematorium world very exciting.

New Update Live. It will be the last huge. I stil have many ideas to wrote down, but i fell like i hit a good saturation of coverd topics and a word count around 4450. I dont put them entirly in the stash, but the IA will be finallized soon. From now on, i will spent a bit time to correct failures and orhography. And will add "cosmetic" things like Names or so. Many thanks for all the Help. Iam a bit proud of my Work, after all i worked over a year on it. And you guys were a huge help. If you find any failures, i thank in advance and will correct them.