Grand Master Belial Posted May 30, 2016 Author Share Posted May 30, 2016 It doesn't matter really. Just toss the link and I'll amend it to your DA vow. When you are complete, then post the completed piece in the DA thread. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoebus Posted May 31, 2016 Share Posted May 31, 2016 I have failed. I bear the shame of reaching for a standard I couldn't achieve in the allotted time. A mere collection of stories and some details of their fleet is all that the Swords of Aldurukh were able to bring to this conclave... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grand Master Belial Posted June 1, 2016 Author Share Posted June 1, 2016 The competition has been extended to June 15th so you still have a little time left. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoebus Posted June 1, 2016 Share Posted June 1, 2016 Excellent! I hadn't noticed the extension. I shall endeavor to atone for my shame... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoebus Posted June 1, 2016 Share Posted June 1, 2016 Brother Arkley, I was reading through your Blades of Alaric. First things first: very impressive. That's an ambitious storyline you've given us. I had three things to bring up. Maybe they're worth something to you, maybe they're not: 1. I like the Iron Manticores back-story. I also like the integration of the 27th Order. There's no connection between the two stories, however. Furthermore, while the 27th Order was meant to inherit the history, and tithing responsibilities of the Chapter... but the Iron Manticores were expunged from history. Ergo, it's not like anyone would expect tithes from them to begin with. The Swords of Alaric ended up being listed as belonging to a different Founding. They didn't maintain, the name, iconography, or colors of the Manticores. There's no connection or subterfuge to maintain a link between the two. 2. The revelation of the destruction of Caliban and the corruption of the Fallen is arguably the most important bit of the introduction of the 27th... but it's treated like an afterthought. 3. Orders don't appear until "Savage Weapons," though we can assume they had been in place for quite some time. Worth noting is the fact that Orders don't replace Chapters... but are a collection of Chapters. "By the Lion's Command" admittedly makes matters somewhat nebulous, since Chapter Master Belath is in command of the Second Order, while Grand Master Haradin is in command of the Third Order... but the lore as a whole indicates that each Order is comprised of several thousand warriors. My question to you, then, is whether you use "Order" to mean "Chapter" or if 27th Order was sufficiently depleted in manpower when they arrived in the future to only be able to have one Chapter from their ranks. Other than that, I would only offer that there are some grammatical errors/run-on sentences. Then again, I'm hardly perfect in that regard ( I love my long-winded sentences)! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Captain Arkley Posted June 1, 2016 Share Posted June 1, 2016 Brother Arkley, I was reading through your Blades of Alaric. First things first: very impressive. That's an ambitious storyline you've given us. Thank you :) I had three things to bring up. Maybe they're worth something to you, maybe they're not: 1. I like the Iron Manticores back-story. I also like the integration of the 27th Order. There's no connection between the two stories, however. Furthermore, while the 27th Order was meant to inherit the history, and tithing responsibilities of the Chapter... but the Iron Manticores were expunged from history. Ergo, it's not like anyone would expect tithes from them to begin with. The Swords of Alaric ended up being listed as belonging to a different Founding. They didn't maintain, the name, iconography, or colors of the Manticores. There's no connection or subterfuge to maintain a link between the two. Their fall from grace is the thing that's expunged, but you are right that's not clear... I will have to sort that. The Blades took only their number in the founding. The only connection is the Sword of the Grand Cross which is the remade Manticores Blade. 2. The revelation of the destruction of Caliban and the corruption of the Fallen is arguably the most important bit of the introduction of the 27th... but it's treated like an afterthought. I didn't deem it as important as the Chapters founding but again I can possibly look to expand this. 3. Orders don't appear until "Savage Weapons," though we can assume they had been in place for quite some time. Worth noting is the fact that Orders don't replace Chapters... but are a collection of Chapters. "By the Lion's Command" admittedly makes matters somewhat nebulous, since Chapter Master Belath is in command of the Second Order, while Grand Master Haradin is in command of the Third Order... but the lore as a whole indicates that each Order is comprised of several thousand warriors. My question to you, then, is whether you use "Order" to mean "Chapter" or if 27th Order was sufficiently depleted in manpower when they arrived in the future to only be able to have one Chapter from their ranks. My assumption was Orders were Chapters it seems the Dark Angel thing to call them. I always imagined they arrived back to Caliban system with approx 1700 men as they were coming home to reinforce and rearm. Other than that, I would only offer that there are some grammatical errors/run-on sentences. Then again, I'm hardly perfect in that regard ( I love my long-winded sentences) I am not the best at writing so you will have to forgive me If you have suggestiono I am all ears :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grand Master Belial Posted June 15, 2016 Author Share Posted June 15, 2016 We are in the final stretch with the end in less than 24 hours. Let's see if we can get in a few more completions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Captain Arkley Posted June 15, 2016 Share Posted June 15, 2016 Ill post my updated Origin later... Bedtime :(... Work all night., Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Captain Arkley Posted June 15, 2016 Share Posted June 15, 2016 I, Nkosana, chapter master of the Sons of Thanatos , in the name of THE LION, make this oath of moment to submit a complete history of my chapter and it's honored brothers. Name: The Sons of Thanatos Founding Chapter: Angels of Absolution Founding: 11th – 544.M35 Chapter Master: Nkosana Homeworld: Raethe (Adopted 894.M36) Fortress-Monastery: Death's Gate (Planet) – (Fleet-Based) Apocalypse Class Battleship Main Colours: Black & Bone with Red. White Robes Speciality: Oversized 1st Company (200+ Members) Dread Walkers/Dread Riders Battle Cry: “In death we grant you absolution.” Estimated Strength: Full Strength Origins Most Chapters created by the High Lords of Terra are given a mandate, the Sons of Thanatos are no exception. They were given a planet to protect which was given to a high population of psykers. The Sons of Thanatos have never made landfall to this planet is it is declared off limits by the Inquisition, given this is it not surprised that the Unforgiven treat them with suspicion this is not to say they will not fight together but nothing of the Unforgiven secret mission is known to the Sons. The Dark Angels have used the Sons to their own advantage in numerous occasions usually for cover of the Dark Angels hunt for the Fallen. Whether the Sons see this deception there is no evidence. This population was used to feed the God-Emperor. This planet suffered a catastrophic failure in 622.M36 as the core of the planet ripped itself apart causing massive earthquakes and volcanic eruptions. Even thou the Sons has no means to stop the destruction of the Planet they still consider it a failure, the Chapter Master at the time declared the Chapter a penitence crusade, adopting a more nihilistic approach. After the adoption of Raethe the Sons started to worship death and this proved to define the Chapter for all eternity. Home World For the first 1350 years of the Chapters creation the Sons was a fleet based Chapter and recruited from the worlds in nearby systems to their Mandate. After the destruction of the planet the Chapter free of their duty. They adopted Raethe as their homeworld. Raethe is located in Segmentum Tempestus, In a 5 planet system rotating a yellow sun. The Planet is a Feral Verdant World, the surface has very few water bodies, 1 ocean splits the land mass while a great lake is fed by the ocean. Most of the planet is covered in a rain forest and wild grasslands most of the population live in huts up in the panoply of the massive trees that cover over half of the world it is not unknown for these Tree Cities to be heavily populated more so than most indigenous species tend to be. Each of these Tree Cities are ruled by Death Priests, with Dread Seers providing council and wisdom, although Death is considered the ultimate the Raethian people are not without honour. The population of nearly 6 million are considered to be below the Imperium view. The people worship Death as the ultimate, there is nothing that escapes it grasp. Whether it is via sacrifice, headhunting or death match fights everything revolves Death in some form. As a big portion of male children either die or become recruits for the Sons, Raethe has become dominated by strong Female leadership over the last 5 millennia. 1 in 5 males that survive the games are kept by the tribes to act as breeding stock. Combat Doctrine The Sons use Terminators to great effect, the 1st Company is well over sized by the guidelines of the Codex Astartes, Terminators never fight understrength or seconded to other Companies they fight as a whole or not at all. It has been noted in battles that this tactic is overkill but it has served the Sons over the last 6 millennia. The other half of the 1st Company are formed into elite biker squads These bikers are used for harassing the enemies and deep infiltration into enemy territory. Unlike the Terminators it is not unknown for Bike Squadrons to lend their strength to other companies. The Chapter makes good use of Predator Tanks and Whirlwinds. Land Raiders also play a part in any armoured assault the Sons perform. The Sons also use Scouts for sabotage, it is not unknown for enemy armies to lose supply depots etc to the Chapters scouts. Organization Unlike the Unforgiven and Codex Chapters as a whole the Sons 1st Company is split between Terminators (Dread Walkers) and Biker Squadrons (Dread Riders). The 2nd to 5th Companies are the Battle Companies each company has their own veterans. It is from these Veterans that the 1st Company get their members. It is not unknown for exceptional Battle Brothers to be promoted to the 1st The 6th Company were a Reserve Company however when the Chapter prepares for mass Tank battles most of the crews are taken from the 6th as such they have developed a reputation of being very efficient in this style of warfare. As such the 6th are considered a separate formation and no longer a Reserve Company. The 7th to 9th are the Reserve Companies and function as such. The 10th is the Scout Company, they are used extensively as saboteurs. Also as infiltrators when the Dread Riders as considered unsuitable. Fleet Assests 1 Apocalypse Class Battleship – Pride of Thanatos 2 Battle Barges – Dread Reaver & Sword of Raethe 10 Strike Cruisers Various numbers of small craft including Thunderhawks. Recruitment Given the populations predilection for Death they are taught as an early age to fight and learn to appreciate Death is the master of all. Children as young as 8 are taught to fight in arenas and hunting games, while its not common children do die in these games. By the age of 12 they are chosen by the native Death Priests and Dread Seers to be offered to the Sons as possible recruits. These recruits are taken to the Chapters Flagship and tested by the Chaplains and Librarians, if they are found suitable they will start to undergo the process to become a Space Marine. For the population of Raethe becoming a Space Marine is to become an Avatar of Death, it is possible why parents of male children make them perform in the Arenas and Games. With the adoption of the Death Cult the Chapter adopted new designations for all officer ranks. Death Priests are the Chapters Chaplains, a Officer that already symbolises Death it is considered one of the highest honours a Marine can hope for. Dread Seers are the Chapters Librarians. As the Chapter recruited more from Raethe the Librarians became more enthralled with causing fear and terror in their enemies as such it is not unknown for them to specialist in dominating and compelling enemies to fight each other. The Chapter Master has the honorific title of Lord Thanatos. Appearance and Iconography The armour of the Sons is Black and Red halved. Any robes worn are White. any Squad marking are Bone in colour. Weapons usually have green casing. The Chapter Symbol is a stylised Skull with Crossed Swords behind it. Beliefs Before planet fall on Raethe the Sons of Thanatos where quite standard in their beliefs, The Emperor is to be venerated as the Master of Mankind and the creator of the Adeptus Astartes. Given their geneseed they do consider the Lion to be their genetic Father. After the Chapter claimed Raethe things began to change over the first 500 to 700 years, as the new recruits started to become a faction in the Chapter, first as a minority of the Scout Company to the eventual domination of the Chapter. The Sons began to carry tribal fetishes personifying death. Soon Chaplains preached Death, this led to the Chapter becoming very similar to Death Cults which has also led to some deviant behaviour such as cannibalism this however is only a rumour and had never been confirmed. If it is true the Chapter practices these behaviours behind closed doors. Gene-seed As with all Dark Angel successor Chapters the Sons of Thanatos gene-seed is considered to be very pure. Given the High Lords of Terra's reluctance to use Dark Angels gene-seed is it unknown what made them use Angels of Absolution instead. But given the rumours of deviant behaviour it brings to question whether something has started to fail. Battle-cry “In death we bring you absolution.” Selected Battles/Events 566.M35 – Death of Kallistos The first Chapter Master of the Sons Kallistos was killed in during a space battle in which he and his 1st Company with elements of the 3rd and 4th boarded a space hulk infested with Orks. MekBoss Grimsnaga laid low the Mighty Hero when he caught Kallistos with his Power Claw. Vengeance of his death did not take long when the Chapters Champion Markos killed the MekBoss in single combat. After the destruction of the Hulk the Sons of Thanatos made Markos the 2nd Chapter Master. 901.M36 – Disappearance of the 3rd. During routine patrol of a nearly sector, the Battle Barge Gates of Tartarus disappeared, The Chapter declared a Crusade but after 300 years the Company and Ship were declared lost. The 3rd Company was finally rebuilt after the declaration. 421.M37 – Brothers of Death The Sons are called upon to aid in a crusade with the Mortifactors & Brazen Claws. They answered the call and sent over half the Chapter. The Crusade was successful and the Ork Waaagh was stopped before they could cause major damage to nearby systems. During this time the Mortifactors and Sons formed strong brotherly bonds over similar ideals. This has lead to a very strong alliance between both Chapters that has lasted to the present. It is not unknown for both Chapters to crusade with each other. 932.M39 – The Dark Angels The exact details of this meeting have been kept secret and anything written about it is pure rumour. How the Dark Angels found out the Sons of Thanatos where a Successor Chapter is unknown but the Dark Angels have used this to their advantage. The Sons have fought along side the Unforgiven in a few battles but they have usually left the Sons in difficult situations due to other complications. But as to why the Sons do not refuse to fight by their side has been led to believe the Chapter Masters of the Sons know something. 711.M40 – Chaos Unleashed The Lost Sons returned, after being declared lost for nearly 4 millennia they returned but not in the way the Chapter would have hoped. They returned not as the Sons of Thanatos but the Death Knights of Adrastos. With daemonic allies the Death Knights launched an attack on an orbital station currently garrisoned by the Sons , Death Eagles and the Imperial Paladins. The station was lost with all hands. All 3 Chapters swear vengeance. Heroes of Infamy Chisomo – The First Dread Master (3th Grand Master) Most of the history of the Sons is surrounded in mystery, this seems to be due to design, the Imperium has very few records of the Chapters Heroes but one such record is of Chisomo, He was the first Grand Master to be called Dread Master he was also the first Raethian to become the Chapter Master. By this time the Death Cult has taken over the Chapter and Chisomo was the Vanguard. He was nothing short of a brute, quick to anger, quick to kill for slight provocation, this however came to a head when he would constantly berate the Chapter Master of the Marines Malevolent during a campaign from simple insults to sucker punching the Master. The Sons were left without a Grand Master for the rest of the Campaign. To a few he was an Avatar of Death, but to most of his fellow Masters they were too glad for his passing. It is still unsure how he became Grand Master. Masters of the Chapter Nkosana – Current Dread Master Nkosana is considered as one of the finest Heroes the Chapter has ever had, like Death himself Nkosana is a very patient man. Soft spoken even in the heat of battle his voice is a constant calm. Where as most Masters have a standard command squad Nkosana is always accompanied into battle with 2 Death Priests the sight of 3 Astartes with Skull Masks is enough to strike fear in most enemies. Even with his calm demeanour in battle he is a maelstrom of destruction. Armed with a 2 Handed Power Spear of unknown origin and his combat shotgun he used as a Scout. Wearing the most advanced MkVIII Power Armour. Nkosana has proven himself time and again as a great leader. Weapons of Death (Relics) Mayeso – (Test) This ancient Power Spear dates back to before the Horus Heresy, it was found of Raethe over 2000 years ago and given to the Chapter as a gift by the Tribes after it was discovered. Until Nkosana became the Dread Master the Spear never left the Chapters Armoury it is an unusual weapon. However Nkosana noticed the ancient writing on the haft of the weapon. He picked the weapon and knew it was his, it was his test to prove his worth. The Spear can pierce armour with ease, it can also be used as a thrown weapon returning to the users hand with built-in teleporter in the hilt. http://i1116.photobucket.com/albums/k574/jetpaczx/spacemarine%202_zpsutaowb3e.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grand Master Belial Posted June 16, 2016 Author Share Posted June 16, 2016 And this competition is OVER! Congrats to all who participated and submitted an article! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grand Master Belial Posted June 16, 2016 Author Share Posted June 16, 2016 At long last, the competition that was kicked off on Liber Day has finally come to an end. It was a glorious competition this year that saw a massive growth to surrounding forums with lots of participation in each. The event was a success and will likely be repeated in the future. Those who did not get their entries in on time are welcome to post at a later date or wait for the next year's competition. Feel free to post in the threads your comments, recommendations and suggestions for next year's competition or PM me. And now for the Roll of Honor: CODEX SPACE MARINES - Out of 10 Participants the following have emerged victorious! Brother SP - Iron Heralds Empurata - Helion Legion (Sons of Guilliman) Iron Aquifer - Bellatus Cael (Sons of Possibly Dorn) Race Bannon - Red Shoulders (Sons of Corax) BLOOD ANGELS - Out of 8 Participants the following have emerged victorious! appiah5 - The Reborn CaptainHelion - Blood Owls Dolchiate Remembrancer - Crimson Sons of Vengeance Father Mapple - Blood Suns Nicodemus Doloroso - Angels Sorrowful DARK ANGELS - Out of 6 Participants the following have emerged victorious! Brother Arkley - Blades of Alaric - Zealots of the Emperor - Sons of Thanatos Grand Master Belial - Caliban Lions SPACE WOLVES - Out of 2 Participants the following have emerged victorious! Grahl Ironheart - Night Howlers ADEPTA SORORITAS - Out of 8 Participants the following have emerged victorious! Noeh - Ashen Wolves of Gersemi Servant of Dante - Order of the Glorious Reprisal Spacefrisian - Daughters of Russ ADEPTUS MECHANICUS - Out of 4 Participants the following have emerged victorious! Kelborn - Household Valcorian Tiger9Gamer - 413th Lucius Expedition Force - Thread Tyriks - Adamant Legion ASTRA MILITARUM - Out of 6 Participants the following have emerged victorious! Grand Master Belial - 45th Imperial Regiment librisrouge - Cadian 333rd Ubique - Terran Vigils Ulrik_Ironfist - 8th Jotunheim Grenadiers Regiment CHAOS SPACE MARINES - Out of 5 Participants the following have emerged victorious! Beachymike123 - Siege Makers LOST AND THE DAMNED - Out of 3 Participants the following have emerged victorious! Warsmith Gorrched - Sons of Iron AGE OF DARKNESS - Out of 9 Participants the following have emerged victorious! Drakrth - Black Horde Ion - 954th Expeditionary Fleet (XVI Legion) LIBER ASTARTES - Out of 1 Participants the following have emerged victorious! HUZZAH! to all emerged victorious! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Shadow Guard Posted June 16, 2016 Share Posted June 16, 2016 Well done GMB, I must applaud your persistence and perseverance in continuing to develop and delver the Brotherhood of Angels competition. In the fine tradition of the Inner Circle you have continued to face the odds with stubborn resistance and brought much glory to the Legion, the Lion and the Rock! SG Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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